This was not my first book by Ms. Tenorio and therein lies the problem and hence the review. The first one I read was light, breezy, mildly entertaining, with a lot of flaws. If I'd bothered to review it, I'd have given it a 3. Not the worst couple of bucks I spent, but hardly great literature. So why come back? Because I thought the issues might be isolated to one book that had been poorly edited. So in the mood for light and breezy, I came back to Ms. Tenorio. I won't again. If you liked your first one, you might be wise to stop there.
The Good:
Light, breezy, and fun tomboy to hot girly romp. The writing was frequently witty and smart. I like the friends to lovers discovery.
The Bad:
I don't have ADHD, so on occasion I found the transitions in time, location, and speaker to be too abrupt and had to reread. Eventually, I quit caring and went into cruise mode. I hate to not finish a book, but she lost me emotionally somewhere in the middle when I got bored.
Just like her other book, the characters are not fully developed. The hero, the villain, and her brother could be the same guy - there's no change of voice, and nothing to differentiate them in behavior, except Burke is apparently a better lover (not that her brother is involved in that equation). Yes, I get the point of a romance - the emotional connection and the best sex ever, but hey, I want to know and like him. If I just want the best sex ever I can go read that online for free. There was never any closure about why he was avoiding her to begin with. The other thing is that we don't get to see his emotional growth. This is more like Burke takes the attitude of, "Well if that's what you want, then that's what you'll get!" Sexual tension, good sex, and bang (excuse the pun) he's now her devoted hero. Really? Is this young adult fiction with graphic sex?
The heroine is possibly more angst ridden at times than Bella in Twilight,and there were several times where I just didn't like her a whole lot - mostly when this bright, smart woman just got stupid and childish. She's underdeveloped - as in immature so all she does is get angry and then fight. But, when Burke bets her car (that she loves so much), she doesn't do or say anything. Unbelievable. I was unable to remain attached to the character after several moments in this book. In fact, I got to the point where I was hoping that Burke would wise up and lose her.
A failure to describe the main characters left me to my own devices. Then when I had a comfortable image (yeah, yeah, eyes and hair, thanks I saw them) the author tells me more than halfway through the book that our heroine is like 5'-8". It made me wonder what else I hadn't been told. If it was a mystery, this would have been one of those ones that give you the info in the reveal without ever giving you the clue in the book. Not nice.
The Ugly:
This book proves that professional editing and publishing is no better at times than self-publishing! Sure the typos and grammar problems weren't a big issue, but how about the lack of pacing and language choices. When the witty and smart disappeared (as it did in the middle) it became boring and the reality set in. Just like the other book, we had a great opening and hook (about the first three chapters) a really annoying and dull middle, and then some well written hot sex, and then the requisite wrap up, which was better written than the middle but not even close to the beginning. This leaves me to believe that someone polished the heck out of the first three chapters to attract the publisher, likes to write the sex, and then filled in the rest. Shame on the editor for letting this happen..
The point and giggle factor:
"Cass dazedly realized..." that's just tough to read and it's hard to realize anything if you are dazed. This needed some type of qualifier, "Even in her dazed state she realized..."
He's making passionate love to her and she's so excited she can hardly bear it as she watches through, "sleepy eyes" Really? Lids lowered in passion, hooded... but hey, if she's sleepy - it ain't that good.
"felt a sense of sensual power" Uhm maybe a rush of power? Calling all synonym finders - sense and sensual that close together is lazy!!!
"minimally happier" read that aloud - it's just not smooth.
Piddly - yeah. But it took me out of the story each time. And this happened in multiple places in both the books I read by this author. I felt each time as though the author had gone through and seen a word like "happier" and said to herself, "how was he happier?" and then went looking for adjectives to place in front of those words.
I really wish this author would focus on what she does well and apply it throughout the entire book. She's damn good in many sections, but she fails to maintain it. I was incredibly disappointed. And now realizing that the flaws aren't isolated to one book, I'll move on. I'll wait until the author offers a newer book for free before I try her again.