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What's up with all the five-star reviews?
on June 25, 2011
This was a moderately readable adventure, but the barrage of five-star reviews (all marked as almost 100 percent helpful) has me raising my eyebrows.
First off, what I liked: The plot is decent. A likable young man, Jimmy, is invited to his boss' cabin after the economy collapses, and he and his new cohorts have to defend themselves from various groups of bikers, religious fanatics, etc. Meanwhile, Jimmy's girlfriend, Paula, is missing, and his ex-girlfriend, Julie, is putting the moves on him. The ending looks like it's going to be way too pat, but there is a twist at the very very end that will pique your interest again.
What I didn't like:
* The editing is atrocious. The repeated misuse of apostrophes was especially annoying -- for example, referring to the boss and his wife as "the Dahlgren's" instead of "the Dahlgrens."
* The writing starts out VERY rough. The hit-you-over-the-head foreshadowing was atrocious ("They would find out that very afternoon just how wrong they were" -- that sort of thing). It does improve, though, and the author is at his best when describe action sequences.
* The character development could use a lot of work, especially the women: Julie is tough and pretty. Paula is spoiled and pretty. Patty is kind-hearted. Cindy is smart.
* The obvious political agenda that the author inserted pretty much constantly got old fast -- especially in quotes and such at the beginning of each chapter. I wanted to read a good dystopian tale, not get a political sermon.
This could be a really good read if the author hired an editor who really went over the whole thing with a heavy hand. As it is, I think it's a readable story, but the writing just isn't up to the demands of the plot.