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Destiny's Team: A Story About Love, Choices and Eternity

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What happens when everyone thinks that because they can write a complete sentence they can write a novel? Books like this happen.

We get sock puppet characters who all speak with the same voice---the author's, in an overly formal, prissy and pedantic style.

We get situations that are so obviously cliched, false and forced they will have you rolling your eyes.

We get dialog that never varies, whether the character is screaming with anger or whispering endearments.

We get authorial intrusion in every scene telling us what's happening and how to feel about it. Never are we ever allowed to watch what's happening and decide for ourselves (which is probably best considering the insipid dialog.)

Want an example? Okay, you asked for it.

Our hero, Jason has just been told his girlfriend has been in an accident, and may not survive:

Jason was truly taken aback. The news paralyzed him as he froze in his tracks [though he wasn't walking] staring at Mandy with disbelieving eyes. After a moment of silence he finally spoke.

"Tell me you are joking, Mandy. This cannot be true. Tell me this is just a joke. It is a joke right? Of course it is just a joke now. Although I don't think it is very funny."

Yup, that's what he says. People joke about that all the time, don't they? Notice no contractions. Notice the cardboard quality, the overly formal and just plain silly reactions? That's what you can expect all the way to this scene anyway, when I hurled the book as far as I could with as great a force as I could muster. On the plus side, I must say it went quite a distance. Also, the book is well bound and professionally designed and for the most part, fairly well proofread, which will be a plus for the bean counting nitwits who care more about spelling than content.

Regardless of whether you agree with the author's pro-life agenda or not, I wish you good luck when reading this. If you can tell the difference between good and poor writing, you're going to need it.