42 of 48 people found the following review helpful
on January 15, 2011
This refers to the Kindle edition of this book. I cannot speak about the hard-copy version as I have not seen it. First off, let me say that I love the story line in this series. The characters are great. It's entertaining, fairly fast-paced, and has kept me wanting more from the word "go." If it were just the STORY LINE of the book I was reviewing, I would have given it five stars.
That being said, I almost stopped reading about 1/4 of the way through the FIRST book. The grammatical errors, TERRIBLE sentence structure, jumping from first-person to third-person within the same paragraph, poor proof-reading, and poor editing were enough to drive me insane!!!!!!!!!!!! It gets worse in the second book and at least through the fourth book, since that's all that I've read so far. Don't get me wrong... my spelling is not always perfect, but just using spell/grammar check on this would have helped tremendously!!! I just am one of the people who happens to believe that a book is a complete package. The story is just part of that package. In order for it to be complete, everyone involved in creating said package has to have done his/her job to the best of his/her ability. This just is not the case with this series. Given two days and a red pen, this book/series would have been soooooooo much more readable!
9 of 9 people found the following review helpful
on January 3, 2011
I came across Amanda Hocking whilst browsing for a cheap book to read. I was hooked instantly. My cheap discovery led to buying all of her books within a couple of days, which I might add was still a cheap purchase in total. This girl can write. Yes there are a few editing errors within the book but the storyline totally forgives this and after discovering that Amanda Hocking is self published, who cares about a few errors. This girl deserves all the success that is coming to her and I totally believe its coming.
The book itself is worth the leap of faith to read if you love or even just like a little bit of YA Paranormal or Vampire series then jump on board with this, I'm not going to give away any of the storyline as I find too many reviews do this. Take the chance, you'll love it and you'll love every book that follows, leaving you in suspense for more. Once you finish with this book make sure you check out her other books, I didn't think they would be to my liking but was hooked with them all.
Addictive reading does not explain it.
13 of 16 people found the following review helpful
on August 27, 2010
Having finished the book last night, I needed to sit on the story for a while and really consider what I'd just read. And the simplest answer I could form was something amazing; the blatant answer would be phenomenal. In the second title in Amanda Hocking's My Blood Approves series of books, the story immediately twists into a more serious and darker tale for the book's heroine, Alice Bonham, as her 'future plans' accidentally go awry and the stakes are raised to an entirely new level.
In the first book, Alice meets Jack Townsend and his charming family, who happen to be rich and commendable folks in the neighborhood. It doesn't take long to realize that Jack and the Townsends are vampires. Alice knows that she wants to become a vampire, but her obligations to her younger brother, Milo, keep her from acting so hastily. She inevitably falls in love with Jack, only to run into a monumental complication named Peter, Jack's older brother. In the second book, our leading lady finds out just what it means to become a vampire.
The second book is, in a nutshell, Alice deciding whether the path of a vampire is really the right path for her to take. She asks herself whether this is really the life she's meant to live, and these reflections are starkly exampled in metaphorical events that make her realize, for the very first time, that vampires aren't human. After this dawning revelation, Alice then understands for the first time that Jack and his family aren't human.
After she realizes that the Townsends are predators, new shades begins to unfold about the characters. We learn of patriarchal Ezra's past, and see that even now, although he behaves and acts pleasant for the most part, he has very cold and uncaring moments. In one sense, what semblance of humanity he's managed to hold onto cares very much for Alice; on the other hand, the vampire in him rises now and then, and cares little whether Alice lives or dies. This is the struggle for each member of the Townsend family, a duality that they struggle to control, and Alice has only scratched the surface as she continues to mindlessly provoke the demons within them.
This novel takes quite a huge leap from the chaste and tame themes of the first novel, and becomes much more mature and adult, from alcohol and date-rapists at high school parties, to the graphic gay club scene in which men and women act in ways 'only appropriate in pornography', to the sensual atmospheric vampire club V, teeming with 'Blood-Whores' and the book's secondary-protagonists, Lucian and Violet; two sexy, dark, and twisted vampires that are obsessed with Alice once they catch a whiff of her. The book effectively uses contrasts in characters and their actions to portray Alice's inner turmoil over her own decisions and the choices she's left with. Fate was not a title slapped across the cover for the sake of it; it shares a much deeper theme in this continuation of the first.
At this point in the series, Alice's character still hasn't grown much. She's still childish, naive, insensitive, and self-centered. One would argue that she was destined for the vampire's life for the simple fact that if she's still this immature at her age then she would definitely need the extra years to grow up. But sadly, once turned, a vampire does little, if any, growing. For the most part, they remain the same.
Although still unappreciated and avoided by Alice, Jane is still a presence in the book. Alice's sanctimonious nature rears its fangs in constant judgment of Jane's lifestyle of sex, drugs, and alcohol, but this is only because she does care on some level for Jane's well-being. Though at one point in the book Alice finally realizes what the reader clearly saw in the first novel; Jane's wild binges of debauchery are her way of dealing with pain. And yet, with this knowledge in her grasp, Alice still never questions just what pain and/or anger Jane harbors inside of her; she's too busy worrying about herself and her newfound family, the Townsends. Though near the end of the novel Alice begins to realize just what a friend she has in Jane when danger snaps at their heels, old habits die hard, and Jane's actions pale in comparison to the shade of shrew Alice can't seem to shake; a trait that she unfortunately picked up from her mother.
Alice's newly outed gay sixteen-year-old brother Milo is a dominant force in the story, and much of Fate revolves more around how her relationship with him has changed, and how it will continue to evolve. Milo is just finding himself, and although just as hotheaded as his sister, he also tends to be just as emotionally vulnerable as Alice. In the end, neither of them realized just how much they needed one another, and Alice wonders if she really would have been able to leave him behind after turning into a vampire.
Concerning the driving force behind the series, the Alice-Jack-Peter triangle, it has such tangible charisma that one can almost consider it a character in its own right. Alice's nurtured love for Jack is powerful, but her natured love for Peter still runs its course through her veins, no matter how much Jack disdains it. Peter seemingly doesn't want Alice, and so he leaves. But tragically, Jack and Alice still cannot consummate their love for each other as the bond between Peter and Alice is still strong, and if Jack so much as samples Alice, her blood will be sullied and Peter will instinctively slaughter them both mercilessly.
The reader is led to assume, once events begin to spark the climax, that the final bout will end deus ex machina fashion, but yet another twist of events leaves the reader in awe, craving what's on the next page. The problem: it's the end of the book!
Fate receives a stable 5-Stars for Amanda Hocking's ability to change the game and 'up the ante' while keeping all of the same rules in place. Not to mention that the humor is incredible; at one point Alice's mother accuses her of being on drugs, and threatens to have Alice tested for "Every drug known to man, is that clear?" to which Alice replies "Crystal!" - Am I the only one who finds that pun ingenious? I think not!
1 of 1 people found the following review helpful
on June 8, 2011
I just completed a more comprehensive review of the first book in the series, but I thought I would follow up here for those considering continuing on. Since the two series by Ms. Hocking have earned her a considerable amount of money (with little to no expense since she was self-published) I find it irritating that she has failed to update the ebook with a properly edited version. I know Amazon allows authors to correct mistakes, and the grammatical errors kept stopping me dead in my tracks. I don't appreciate being yanked out of a world that an author has so wonderfully created to be irritated over their misuse of the word your versus you're! It's an instant snap back to reality for me, and it seriously lessens my enjoyment of the books. Since I have read that the errors continue through the fourth book I have decided to stop after the second.
Having said that, I did find the plot line fresh in the second book. Better than some vampire series I've read, even. But the book is a whole, and the poor writing quality kill the enjoyment for me. I can't bring myself to commit to reading two more books that I know will be frustrating.
1 of 1 people found the following review helpful
on May 9, 2012
I absolutely LOVE the My Blood Approves series! I have read this series at least a half a dozen times since I bought it in January! I love Jack and Alice together, but also am drawn to Peter. But ultimately I do believe that Jack and Alice are the perfect couple! I am a fan of the Vampire Diaries books and Twilight books and I must say this series blows them out of the water! I cannot say enough about this series! If you haven't read it yet- I highly recommend it!!! I wish I could give it MORE than just 5 stars! The only complaint I have is that the book Wisdom (the 4th series isn't available on Kindle and I had to order it) I really wish Amanda would come out with the final book of the series titled Swear, but from what I hear that may be a long time before it is released, if at all, according to her website. But in the mean time I recommend to anyone who loves a great vampire love story- read all the books in the series My Blood Approves, Fate, Flutter, Wisdom AND Letters to Elise - all those books in this series are great!
1 of 1 people found the following review helpful
on August 23, 2011
I was hoping that the other reviews posted here were in regards old downloads. This title was released in 2010 and I have no idea why the author hasn't fixed the editing issues.
Fate contains problems with - spelling, punctuation, nonexistent scene transitions (one sentence Alice is walking into the shower - the next she's in bed), storyline problems, missing or incorrect word choices, etc. I also have no idea what Alice looks like. I'm 70% into book two of this series and I have gained these facts: she's short, has wide brown eyes and her hair is long enough to be put in a ponytail. Again, this is something a good editor would pick up on.
Why hasn't this book been edited? If an author uploads a new file they can request Amazon Customer Service to notify people who have already downloaded it. We all could get a new, clean version.
Why hasn't this been done?
I've decided to borrow Flutter and Wisdom and not spend the money for more editing errors.