Most helpful critical review
3 of 3 people found the following review helpful
Would have been 5 stars except for the editing!
on November 20, 2012
Did I say editing? I don't think there was ANY serious editing of this book. OK - put aside the editing. The story itself was quite believable and very fast paced. You certainly get your $$ worth on volume - with really very little filler, just a lot of distraction in grammatical errors, transpositions, wrong use of words, stilted dialog, mixed up character events and missing adjectives. Here's an example. In one scene, 2 key characters decide to go to bed early, but in the next paragraph they are included in dialog with the remaining characters who decided to stay up and discuss planning - jeesh! With a bit of polish, this book would have been terrific. One hopes that a follow up book (and a second book would be expected) gets better draft reviews and editing.