Customer Reviews

His Perfect Submissive

5 star:		(11)
4 star:		(2)
3 star:		(2)
2 star:		(7)
1 star:		(7)

 

 

Let me state emphatically that I enjoyed this book and that if readers are seeking the mucho guy brutale in this D/S story, then this hero, Slade, is not the one.

Slade is in fact seeking "his perfect submissive" but despairs of ever finding her. Many women are after his money, pretending to be what he desires, yet others are too dominant or aggressive for him. He finds his ideal woman in the one he's been trying to avoid, Kara.

Kara is anxious to meet with Slade who happens to be her brother's boss, in an attempt to extricate her brother from an embezzlement scandal where he misappropriated company funds. Slade is loath to meet her, but one look at her as he arrives at his office, nervously waiting all softness and innocence drives the arrow right through his heart. He instantly recognises the woman he has been looking for, the woman capable of satisfying his raging desires.

Not being one to miss an opportunity, as his enterprising success demonstrates, he offers her marriage in exchange of her brother's debts. He explains that he is a dominant who wishes to engage in all that this sexual lifestyle entails with her. Kara agrees as she is vastly attracted to this man and has no other means of paying him the money unless she works for years and pays him in instalments. This, however, would mean depriving her ailing mother of the medical care which is vital for sustaining her in life.

Slade senses a strong reticence in Kara which is not due to her lack of sexual experience alone. His tender and caring attitude help Kara gain enough confidence to confide that she had been raped as a child and expects the D/S sex to be brutal. He then proceeds to show her in the most endearing way what it is that turns him on, exposing her to her sensual nature and the delights of sexual intimacy.

It is a tender well written story, and this comes from someone who is not keen on weak heroines. Ms Aaron has created a shy, gentle woman whose sexual abuse caused her to withdraw from men and who learns to blossom like a lovely flower in the hands of the right man (Aaah! Sweet.)

It's a wonderful love story, the type I like to read, with love and heart and sex.

When I began reading this book, I was a little taken aback with the outlandish premise of a man wanting to marry a woman he does not know, but since this was billed as an erotic D/s book, I was totally willing to just roll with it. That being said, it became harder and harder to get through each page without getting supremely frustrated at the repetition of the heroine's backstory. Normally, when I read a book that has a traumatic event that takes place before the start of the story, the event is laid out to some degree, and then it is acceptable for the author to refer back to said event without outlining the *whole thing* all over again. This book was written in a way that rehashes past events and current emotions to a level of repetition that became almost insulting to the reader, and left me feeling like I just wanted to plow through it to get it over with.

After reaching the 40% mark (reading on a Kindle), I started to just skim the pages, looking mostly for dialogue and the overall gist of each paragraph so that I could simply make my way through it. The extent to which each emotion in the characters' minds was excessively drawn out and lamented over was simply excruciating in the first half, and I just could not coerce myself to sit through it any longer.

The real shame here is that I wanted to like this book. I wanted the heroine to come to terms with her past enough to participate in a healthy relationship. I wanted the hero to help her get there. I guess that in the end, I got those two things - albeit the story jumped past some major plot devices that were thrown out and left unresolved (the heroine's therapy to say the least), but in all honesty this book could have achieved a far superior literary package by cutting about half (no joke, AT LEAST half) of the emotive material, and focusing more on **story** development.

It was a very painful read (no BDSM puns intended). The writing style needs some serious development, and the author totally overused certain phrases ("feel/feels good", "gaze rested on", and a few others) to the point of distraction. End result, I would not recommend this book at all. I really tried to think of a target audience who may like it, but I could not think of one.

Kindle formatting notes - there were some mildly bothersome formatting issues of odd line returns and subsequent line indentations. The eye stalled on those points every time, and I had to reread those sections once or twice to get the cadence right again. Also, there was no TOC or Indexing, meaning you could not skip ahead chapter by chapter, only page by page.

Not only this is poorly written and could benefit from some serious editing and shortening, this reads like an abuse story, instead of a BDSM scenario. I am sorry, I cannot recommend this at all.

If you are into hardcore BDSM don't read it, and restrain your self from criticizing.
There are people out there, who are not into what you like and we all have the right
to like different things. Not all "Kink" has to be vulgar and involve the very things
that turn people away from even trying it.

Bondage and domination do not HAVE TO entail sadistic and/or masochistic behavior.
Bondage/Domination and Sadism/Masochism do not have to go hand in hand and are very different.

People have the right to choose and explore, whichever parts are well suited for "Their"
particular relationship.
I found this book to be very enticing, and for people who are intrigued by a "Loving"
dominant/submissive relationship, or even having just occasional fun with this adventurous
genre, this book is Perfect :)

It teaches you the good qualities of being a submissive, about feelings and fears a
slave/submissive may go through and how a caring, trustworthy, lovable master can
help her learn and conquer them ALL.
It teaches you that with the right approach, and patience, you can both learn as well as
Earn mutual Trust to do anything together :)

I really do not care what the s&m fans have to say about my comment.
Opinions are like a**wholes...
everybody has one, and I am getting tired of people forcing Theirs on others.

Say what you have to say and accept that others may, and have the right to, like different things,
we are not all the same and we all have different relationships...

I respect your right to like to be whipped till you cry out in pain, or whip someone
till you draw blood, it's your business, your turn on, so stop telling me something is bad
if it's not the way YOU think it's supposed to be. Some people only like to be blindfolded to
enhance what they feel,
some like to be tied up and just made love to, because that is what turns them on. I am tired of the hardcore bdsm lovers coming down on everyone who isn't like them. Lay off.
Do what gives you pleasure, and let others do what satisfies Their needs.
It's because of some hardcore BSDM lovers that many people have the wrong impression of KINK in general.
Most of your harsh rude comments turn them off or even gross them out. Just stop it and learn a little phrase "Live and Let Live"

Sorry just got frustrated after I saw all those negative comments.
You maybe a Master or a Mistress or a Dom/Domme, but you are NOT! to anyone else.

P.S. If you would like to learn more about Bondage or Domination or Both...
email me. [...]

If you have nothing else to read and you have this book then I would read it. I had a hard time staying interested in this book. Some of it was very real but I found myself getting extremely annoyed with the main female character. By the end I wanted to beat the crap out of both him and her. I would suggest putting this one back

This is a first novel and as such it needed one more strong edit before publication. It just goes on and on with scenes not justified by plot theme or plot movement. Things just happen. Particularly weak middle and the end just ends without resolution or suggestion of resolution of main problems. Way too much exposition (preachy author) weighing down the action in the story. Well-crafted sex scenes. Good emotional focus. Nice, preachy message repeated about D/S and being loving.

Okay. Main issue for me is the portrayal of dominance. He is a poor dom, in my opinion, who gives himself way too much credit: I'm not selfish (when without his bold selfishness we'd have no premise (he forced her to marry him)), I'm an experienced dom who puts the care and safety of my sub before all else (when he endangered her psychologically repeatedly and was always so very regretful. He demanded that she bare her never-before-shared trauma from childhood and then he was at a lost as to how to react. Of course, his inappropriate reaction caused her to feel abandoned and to go into a mental crisis which he also was insensitive to). He was dealing with someone who was already strongly traumatized. A real dom would have recognized that these were not circumstances to play with, that it was morally wrong to coerce her further to do anything (like marry him, like have sex with him). A real dom, male or female, must be a good judge of when to play or help a sub to move along in submission and when to stop all movement and even step out of those roles so that the other person can get the real mental help that he/she needs. This fictional dom told himself to stop but continued to coerce and push her and hoped for the best.

If I were to try to be sympathetic to the male dom in this story then I'd say one explanation for his poor performance is the difficulty of going from play scenes as the norm to full time D/S lifestyle. In real life, D/S lifestyle or a play scene begins with intense negotiation between two empowered, able potential partners. In this book, there was none. He had no clue and no plan. He isolated his new wife who knew nothing about D/S and had never been sexual before. She did not know her rights as a sub and there was no one to tell her. Also, she was forced to give up her job and had no ready funds of her own. He said he saw that she was terrified and trembling as they said their vows but hoped that he could show her "how good for her" marriage to him could be. A real dom knows that submission must be freely given, not stolen. This idea was referenced in the book but not put to action. Bad dom. He got access to her sexually plus free housecleaning and a cook. What did she get? I wish that she'd gotten psychotherapy out of the deal. She did not. Mistress Sky

The other positive reviews are correct, this book is very romantic. The sex scenes are well written and not, in my opinion, very hardcore or difficult to read. All scenes are very loving and contain all the elements that I think anyone involved in or curious about the lifestyle would love to have. I think this makes a great book for those just venturing into D/S, bondage, and spanking.

Having said that, I felt that the author repeated herself way too many times with the story of the character's past. Also, I personally like more sex, more kink, more bondage, and less constant discussions of emotions in my books. All in all, a good read, but not one I would repeat.

Kara was kidnapped and brutally rape at the age of seven. She has never had a relationship has really never wanted one. She has panic attacks, nightmares of the attacks, but she doesnt want to get any help because she doesnt want to talk about it. Her brother steals money from his boss and is on his way to jail. Kara will do anything to make sure that her beloved brother doesnt go to jail. Kara goes to the boss - Slade to let him know that she will do want ever it takes to make this right and pleads that Slade not press charges.

Slade is a Dom and is looking for the perfect Sub. and he think he finds it in Kara. Slade tells Kara and if she agress to Marriage then he will not press charges on the brother. Kara agrees, but she has know idea how she will be able to do this. They get married then Slade tells her that he is looking for a Sub. Im not talking about chains and tables and obeying him in the bedroom. I talking about kneeling at the front door when he comes home from work. A Perfect house, perfect wife and perfect kids. If he feels that she is not "behaving" then he will paddle her butt until she is sorry and back on the strait and narrow. So boy is Slade in for a suprise when he tries to have sex with her and she flips out, panic attack, throws up, shakes you name it. Kara has to them tell him what happened. So now everything that Slade really wanted in a Submissive isnt so important anymore. He is falling in love with Kara and he wants to help and protect her. kara doesnt tell him everything at once so it seems that Slade can never really do anything right. Finally Kara breaks down - while Slade is paddling her but because she refusses to tell him whats wrong and a two weeks of him asking. Kara tells the entire story and tells him it ok if he leaves because everyone that she has ever loved and always left her because of what happened to her. Slade will do everything he can to let Kara know that she is loved and he is not going to ever leave her. Once she realizes this she gives him what he wanted from the beginning- the perfect Submissive.

I am an avid writer and a constant reader. I found myself flipping the pages as I was caught up in the story line, but the more I read the more I found myself flipping the pages back instead of forward. Constantly finding errors in the plot and misspellings made me irritated with this story. I did realize that this author has a beautiful way of telling a story but that's the #1 rule for writing. You must show instead of tell. The way this author described the emotional connections between the characters was superb and captivating but more dialogue would have been wonderful. Given the sensitive subject matter I thought it was quite brave of Alyssa and she had very creative ways of hooking the reader. But when you are so drawn to the errors along the way or interrupted by missed facts within the stories plot, it severely severs the readers connection with the characters and the story. The redundant phrasing was the most annoying part of this book. Stating one phrase and in less then 2 paragraphs stating it again in the same literal context.

A bit of advice: After you are finished writing the book and you feel complete, have an outside person re-read your story. Fresh eyes to catch any hang ups. A simple read through would have yielded the error that Kara ordered Strawberry Short Cake and Slade later fed her a melting strawberry sundae.

For BDSM topic this book was quite primitive and amateurish. First 60% of plot was simply repetitive. Author described over and over again Kara's agonizing feelings like not relying on that reader could understand it without endless recital. Erotic scenes are poorly written and quite boring in comparison with other books. BDSM is complicated and sophisticated topic and this book is far from reaching acceptable level.