1.0 out of 5 stars
I Simply Can't Believe It, December 28, 2009
A Kid's Review
This review is from: The Honey Trap: Unveiling The Web of Deceit (Paperback)
The story is self-published, so I give it a chance. The only other review is made by the author. A little bit desperate there, but it's okay.
The story tells, tells, tells. Telling seems to be the author's only way of writing. Hasn't she ever heard of that important writer's rule? To show, not tell?
The sentence structure needs work. It's a mix of choppy and run-on, and commas tend to jump around to where ever they want. The dialogue doesn't follow basic rules for punctuation and doesn't give new speakers new paragraphs. The typos build up, until the reader has no heck of a clue to where each sentence starts, who's talking, or what's happening.
Where was the editor? Where was the author? How did this book manage to get binded and stay together?
The plot is...hmmm, what is the plot? Is there one? Well, how would I know? The writing's messed up so bad I can't tell if any of it supposed to make sense. The pacing quickens and slows down every two sentences, as if it can't quite decide its speed.
I doubt the author did any research; some things are exaggerated while others are just forced onto the page. She's like a two-year-old telling mommy and daddy all the cool things she has in her messy room, making it all up part of the way.
On the bright side, the author managed to tell us what characters looked like. Very telling, but hey, at least she knows to paint those little cardboard characters of hers.
I bet the paper the author wrote this book on screamed for mercy. Readers will too.
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5.0 out of 5 stars
Chic Lit Adventure From Rehab to Paradise, September 14, 2009
This review is from: The Honey Trap: Unveiling The Web of Deceit (Paperback)
The Honey Trap by Annette Dunlea
pbk STG 12.97, download STG2.98 ISBN: 978-1-4092-7467-4
Abstract:
Angelina, Ava and Felicity were three women with three very different lives. These beautiful women lived unknown to each other in different parts of Ireland. The three Irish celebrity wives dealt with sex, fame, dirty money, deceit and power. Angelina, a business woman, an IT librarian, Felicity an ex-actress and footballer's wife and Ava, Ireland's first supermodel, came together by accident and discovered they shared a secret. All married at one time to rich and powerful men until each in turn discovered a secret that devastated their worlds. Add to this cocktail a managing director, a professional Irish footballer and an entrepreneurial hairdresser to the rich and famous. Add a touch of greed and illicit secret dealings, spiced up with drugs and alcohol.
What happens when love becomes hate? When you discover the best years of your life, whose kids you reared, whose house you kept has deceived you, you're living a lie. Anger and revenge are the consequences and lives are devastated in the process. Travel the journey as three women discover that their soul mates and their marriages are a fallacy, a lie. It becomes a path of self - healing and self - rescue. Failure is not an option. Can anything be salvaged from this chaos?
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