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Great Writing, But Some Difficult Premises to Overcome
on January 30, 2013
The blurb which describes this book is rather promising. Jessie is a single mom struggling to make ends meet while Jack is a billionaire who is looking for a woman who is interested in him rather than his pocketbook. As the story begins, Jack is dealing with an ex-girlfriend who wants him back because she misses his money, but he has come to a realization that he doesn't want to be with another fake woman; he wants someone who is down-to-earth and honest. Great start, right?
Unfortunately, when Jack first meets Jessie, he decides she's THE ONE before he knows a single thing about her other than the fact that she's a waitress at Denny's. There's nothing to indicate an immediate soul-deep connection or an overwhelming physical attraction between the two; he simply sees her as a normal girl working as a waitress, and he decides that he's going to make her fall in love with him. Don't get me wrong, everything from the narration and the conversation between the two indicates that Jessie is a nice, attractive girl, but I just didn't see why Jack would decide that she was worth all the time and effort he went to to get to know her after she did nothing but serve him and his friends after they stopped into Denny's one night.
If I could have bought an instant attraction, I could probably have gotten over some of the other roll-my-eyes moments in the book, but I couldn't. There are too many things that happen that fall just shy of being utterly ridiculous. For example, Jack wants to keep his wealth a secret, so what does he do to help Jessie out? He sets up an elaborate party at one of the hotels his family owns, pretends to borrow a dress and shoes from the lost and found at the hotel (which both just happen to be Jessie's exact size), he "calls in a favor" to have her car repaired...he does all these things for someone he hardly knows, never mind the fact that they're "not quite dating." There are other things he does that border on the absurd, but I won't spoil the rest of the story.
I wish an editor or writer's circle or someone had worked with the author to change just a couple of things in the story to bring it more into the realm of the believable, but I can only suspend so much disbelief. The book IS well written (except, of course, for the premise which fell apart for me), and I'll admit to being interested in the next book in this series, but as for this one, there were too many things that I couldn't get over that prevent me from really recommending it to anyone else.