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This book floundered after the first half.
on December 11, 2015
2.5 stars. This book had so much fabulous potential, but it floundered after about 47% and then resurfaced for the last few pages. I have seen a lot of stories like this. It is as if the author had a beginning they worked diligently on, and an ending they took the time to polish, but then it is like they got bored or disenchanted and threw any old thing in-between to connect the two. There started to be punctuation and grammar mistakes, continuity problems, clumsy sentence structure; and she even mixed up the names of two characters at one point. Characters who were never in the same scenes because they lived in two different states! Even though the author said she was a Photography major, her descriptions of photography class and assignments were way off; developing film and printing photos is not the same thing. She also wrote some pretty insensitive things like, the MC had to wash the smell of Chinatown off so she wouldn't smell offensive for her date. Really? But the dress she bought from Chinatown for her date that night would have smelled like Chinatown. This was twice as bad from a character who only deemed it necessary to shower if she got noticeably dirty; body odor be damed! This was not presented as a personality quirk either. It made it sound like this was normal for Texas girls. Anyway, all in all, about one half of this book was wonderful. The other half was a mess. This was recommended to me as a book for a anti-bullying read-a-thon, but I don't know why because there was no bullying in it. It is, however, a story about mental illness. Another reason it is a shame this book petered out halfway.