41 of 42 people found the following review helpful:
3.0 out of 5 stars
Great story & Characters but needed a dictionary to get through!, September 17, 2008
This review is from: Servant: The Acceptance (Mass Market Paperback)
I enjoy Lori Foster's books (aka L.L. Foster)and this new series by her is great and shows wonderful potential as a series. Good plot, interesting characters, wonderful tension and chemistry between the main and secondary characters, but the reason I only gave it 3 stars is because I kept having to stop and pick up my dictionary to figure out what the hell was happening! I actually wrote down the words that dragged me away from the story, there were 31!
I feel I am a fairly well read, intelligent human being. But the words used were so grandiose they actually took away from the story, not added to it as I'm sure the author and editor hoped to achieve with an apparent overuse of a thesaurus. I'm always happy to learn new words, but I felt I was getting beat over the head with the collegiate word use and placement . . .
Some examples I copied are these: "Annoying sedulousness", "Exigous weight", "endogenous perception", "calumnious statement", "And so went the banausic nature of her life."
I hope her next book tones down the over the top words, so the flow will be better! I really like this heroine, but I don't think I can sit through another grammar course like this last book.
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27 of 29 people found the following review helpful:
4.0 out of 5 stars
was this a novel or a spelling test?, September 12, 2008
This review is from: Servant: The Acceptance (Mass Market Paperback)
The chronicle was superlative. The phraseology was analogous to someone stimulating their thesaurus and procuring the most unintelligible utterances obtainable.
Get the picture? When I could get past all of the hundred dollar words, it was a great story!!!!!
I don't know how the words got past the editor, but if the next volume is written the same way, I won't be going back for more. At times it got so bad I actually tried to put simple words in their place just so the text would flow better.
Someone needs to take away her "Word-A-Day" toilet paper!
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11 of 12 people found the following review helpful:
4.0 out of 5 stars
Servant: The Acceptance, September 6, 2008
I was actually going to comment on this myself. I enjoyed the story a lot, but the high level vocabulary throughout the book seemed excessive and unnecessary. Tended to take away from the story as I sat thinking through the vocabulary to decide what was being said. I must say I have read master's thesis with less complicated vocabulary.
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