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Intriguing start...needs some polish
on January 21, 2013
I really like what Cameron is doing here. Really, really like it. I plan to purchase the oncoming full books and read them with gusto.
However, I have a big issue with one aspect of his writing: nearly all the voices are the same. As in, each character reasons and speaks too similarly. At one point, the Queen says "Wuteva." I highly doubt a prestigious woman would use this mumbled abbreviation. I also expected her speech (as well as two other ancient characters whom I don't want to give away) to be more complex and elegant. It's true that they're living through the centuries and will pick up new manners of speech, but my main point is that too many of the characters have the same patterns of speech.
I know Cameron has it in him to flesh out the characters better and differentiate them more. I really hope that a beta reader somewhere has pointed this out to him. It saddens me how much it detracts from the story for me and takes me out of the picture Cameron is painting.
I think that's why my favorite character so far is Ladle. She comes across almost mentally challenged at times, if not plain off her rocker. But there's something wonderful about her innocent madness! I like her voice, and I applaud Cameron.
I also have a big issue with the editor/transcriber of the book. I found so many typos and dropped words, I nearly pulled my hair out! Again, this detracts from the story, pulling me out as I try to figure out that 'form' should be 'from', 'Bur' should be 'But', or that there's a missing 'a' in a sentence which makes for stilted descriptions. Please be more watchful in the future!
I think Cameron and Danielle will go far. They're just fresh out of the gates and need some polish.