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A promising first novel
on August 9, 2012
David Kazzie is the creator of the subversive, influential, and immensely popular "So you want to go to law school" animation on YouTube. (Indeed, he seems to have brought his YouTube cheering section with him to Amazon.)
"The Jackpot," Kazzie's first novel, is a good effort that shows promise. On the plus side, the book is well produced and has none of the typos, grammatical errors, and other mechanical flaws that seem to plague so many indie titles. In addition, Kazzie is a good stylist and can turn the memorable phrase. He's also capable of writing tight, exciting action scenes.
The negatives may or may not have been picked up by an editor if Kazzie had gone through a traditional publisher. First and foremost is his inconsistency of tone. It seems as if he could not decide whether to write a legal thriller, a satire, a pop-culture mash-up, or a straight novel. The book starts out as an excellent legal thriller, but then various other genres keep turning up, getting between the reader and the story. The other major flaw, in my opinion, was Kazzie's tendency to get bogged down in his characters' backstories. Four fifths of that material should have stayed in his notebooks. We don't need to see the whole iceberg.
Still, as I've said, "The Jackpot" shows a lot of promise. I would definitely buy another e-novel from Kazzie, provided he keeps the price below $5.