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Interesting Plot; Shoddy Execution
on July 30, 2012
"Two Shots" has a catchy story line about a young former city cop turned state conservation officer for the state of Minnesota. The story grabs the reader straight away from the opening page as we wait with the sniper/killer, preparing himself to commit murder in the cold North woods. The writer moves the reader along at a fast pace, keeping the action flowing. Albert did a good job of location and atmosphere description.
Then bam! In Chapter 18, the hiccups began. Misuse of pronouns, misspellings, use of incorrect words, moving from present tense to past tense and then back again in the same paragraph, poor punctuation.
* "Leach he"
* "looked at this watch" instead of "his watch"
* Referred to a state government podium as a "pulpit"
* "your" for "you're"
* "beats" for sugar "beets"
* "let's just say it were me" - do I even need to explain that one?
Regarding characterization, Albert started well, building the premise as to why Leach left the big city for a life in the woods. But then Leach meets Sarah, who shares her story of an bad guy ex-boyfriend who was a mean drunk and took it out on her. Albert then has Leach getting drunk around Sarah during all their dates. What?? Apparently the author thinks Leach is just too dumb to really listen and learn what not to do - or that this is perfectly acceptable behavior when one is trying to impress a new love interest. Hey, but that didn't really stop Sarah who behaved just as stupidly which led to a predictable conclusion. While Albert does a good job of building tension throughout the book, he inserts some fake outs with Sarah's character, which felt like cheap shots at the reader.
Overall, I could only give this book 1 star.