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great plot; seriously needs editing
on January 5, 2013
First I want to say: these books have fantastic plot and faceted characters. The basic writing is good; I recommend these books to anyone who likes paranormal fiction or YA fiction.
However, both books I have read written by this author are *desperately* in need of an editor. There are words missing, bad typos, and also some plain old wrong word choices, where it's clear the words don't mean what the author intended.
I DO NOT mean to be unkind, here.
I enjoyed the books. I hope the author finds a good editor - she could charge more for these if she cleaned them up.
Without the glaring mistakes, I would have given a higher rating and paid regular paperback prices for these. They'll be very popular with YA fiction readers.
Please, correct the grammar - find a good editor and then charge more for your books!
(one small example of why an editor is needed: it is not necessary to pepper your writing with similes - this habit was more glaring in the first book - everything is "like" something else, totally unrelated and not very good. The blackbird feathers falling to the ground were "like twisty bird seeds." It is distracting, and doesn't work - but a good editor will get rid of that stuff for you.)
This is the first author so badly in need of an editor that I have continued reading, however, because the basic writing is quite good: the plot is very imaginative. So, while this review may not feel like praise , it is... definitely give these a read if you are into paranormal or YA fiction.