Undisclosed Desire [Kindle Edition]

M. Peters (Author)

Book Description

Keith D'Ameron has wandered the world as a vampire for three hundred years, traveling through Europe and the East in search of something for which he has no name. Up until now, he has simply enjoyed what his world of the night can bring to him, but now he has come to Spain. Upon entering Seville, a heartbeat rises above the rest of the thrumming pulses occupying the busy city, and something in its siren call urges Keith to investigate.

The owner of this heartbeat is a fiery young man named Javier Estas - and Keith finds, from the very moment their swords cross in a tree-lined square, he cannot rid his thoughts of the Spaniard.  Throwing caution to the wind, he recklessly pursues a relationship that is more passionate than friendship can ever be.  Thrown into Keith's primal courting game, Javier finds that he is helpless to resist falling into the vampire's eyes - or into his bed.  But though Keith's lips and promises of a new life are more tempting than anything he has ever known, can he find the courage to leave all that he has known and admit his undisclosed desires?

Editorial Reviews

From the Author

Undisclosed Desire was the fruit of my first attempt at the National Novel Writing Month competition held every November, where one sits down and writes, from scratch, 50,000 words in thirty days.  When I reached the end of the thirty days, the story captivated my fiancéé, with whom I've been collaborating as far as writing goes, for as long as we've been together.  (Since we met at sixteen, that's a long time!)  She urged me to finish it, and I hemmed and hawed and worked on it in spurts over the next three years, until finally I had finished it in April of 2012.  In June of 2012, my fiancée and I deemed that it was ready for publication, and while I know there are still a few tweaks needed to make it perfect, I was eager to share my story with the world, so here we are!  I'm hoping readers enjoy learning about Keith and Javier's story as much as I did - because, believe me, even though they have been characters who have rolled around in my head since 2000 or so, they grew and expanded into totally different people in this story.  It was an amazing experience, and I truly hope I can cotinue that journey.  Look for their sequel, excerpts of which can be found on my webpage, coming out in mid 2013, and a short story featuring them to be completed in early 2013.

Product Details

• File Size: 780 KB
• Print Length: 401 pages
• Publisher: M. Peters (June 23, 2012)
• Sold by: Amazon Digital Services, Inc.
• Language: English
• ASIN: B008EEAM2K
• Text-to-Speech: Enabled
• X-Ray: Not Enabled
• Lending: Enabled
• Amazon Best Sellers Rank: #620,490 Paid in Kindle Store (See Top 100 Paid in Kindle Store)

Most Helpful Customer Reviews

12 of 12 people found the following review helpful

4.0 out of 5 stars Loved It, But What Ending...? July 31, 2012

By Shar

Format:Kindle Edition|Amazon Verified Purchase

So first of all I really did enjoy Undisclosed Desires by M Peters. I quite liked the two main characters and their clashing personalities that were not very predictable. The book exhibited wonderful characterization and excellent imagery that put you in the place of Spain in this time. However, even though the characters were not necessarily predictable, the plot sort of was. I felt as though there could have been a twist at the end that just did not happen.

I also liked the language used, it was befitting for the time, but the inserts of French and Spanish here and there got a little redundant. Speaking of redundant, there were a couple adjectives that were just used over and over and over again! Seriously though, I wonder how many times the words "older vampire, homolupine, and fledgling" were used. Those just come to mind because, while they are decent descriptions, they were EVERYWHERE. I also noticed that there was a lot of emphasizing (italicizing) in places where it was not really necessary.

Lastly, there was quite a chunk that vanished as far as plot. Without spoiling anything, what I mean is Keith's twin brother and that vial nonsense. Because of the fact that it was not resolved, the whole concept could have been easily removed as a whole. Maybe there was closure as far as that was concerned and it was just edited out? I have no idea. There is also another chunk which I am not mentioning but it has to do with the werewolf concept that also vanished.

Even with these flaws, I still felt as though Undisclosed Desires was a compelling love story that had an interesting setting and even more interesting characters.

11 of 11 people found the following review helpful

3.0 out of 5 stars intense July 31, 2012

By Furio

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The main difference between this enjoyable M/M vampire novel and most of those I have read before is that here we have a love triangle, a man, a woman and a (male) vampire who falls for the man.

The vampire folklore is fairly traditional and many details are given but it is clear that the main focus of the author's attention lies in the complex relationships among the three main characters.
Even if we understand right from the start that the woman does not stand a chance against the vampire's charms it is also clear that the author loves her: beautiful, clever, patient, spirited and self sacrificing. Ofelia is not evil, she does not simply stand in the way of the lovers: she is alive, she is loved and lovely and even the vampire respects her.
Events bring these three people together and their meeting has lasting consequences, that is all.

The romance among these three is very intense and satisfying. We are given enough details to understand the workings of their minds and feel for them. Characterization is consistent and generally good, even that of the side characters.

That said this novel is also flawed. Ms Peters' writing is often redundant, full of unnecessary details (and there are several short episodes which are not really relevant to the plot unless she is planning a sequel). Pacing is encumbered by many flashbacks clumsily woven into the plot, often at the worst of times.
The man often accuses the vampire of speaking too much and not acting but the same could be said of the author who tells instead of showing and does not remember that in fiction any sentence must push the plot forward, be it at a leisurely pace.
The POV shifts constantly and confusingly among the characters as there is nothing to make the reader aware of the shift, not even the simple device of beginning a new paragraph.
Some grammar mistakes, some inconsistencies and a clumsy use of French and Spanish loanwords are also awaiting for a good editor to address them.

11 of 11 people found the following review helpful

4.0 out of 5 stars A fascinating read June 25, 2012

By Linda Eble Swain

Format:Kindle Edition

What happens when a sexy, intelligent vampire finally falls in love? And to make matters worse, not only his the love of his life a mortal, but a married one at that. Both Keith and Javier will steal your heart, keep you enthralled and introduce you to a view of vampires not seen before. Ms. Peters, has a wonderful gift of words with descriptions that will make you feel as if you were right in the scene with them. Provocative, it certainly is with a cast of characters and a story line that at times is amusing and uplifting and at times to the brink of despair. It's one book that I promise you will read more than once, and have you anxiously waiting for more from this very talented author.

More About the Author

M. Peters has been writing stories since she was a little girl. Since she met her fiancée in 1999, they have truly begun to come to life. Undisclosed Desires is her first published work, though she has been editing novels for up-and-coming authors across a wide spectrum of genres for the last eight years. She and her fiancée, who were high-school sweethearts, live in Florida with their two cats. She has recently entered the world of Twitter, and can be followed here while she works on her newest novel: https://twitter.com/MPetersDesires, or like her on Facebook, to read snippets of her upcoming novel here: https://www.facebook.com/MPeters2183

Her website is available here, where you can link up with Amazon to buy her first book as well as read excerpts from her newest works in progress! http://mo8832.wix.com/undiscloseddesires#!home/mainPage

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