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Great premise, weird execution
on September 13, 2013
The good: The world that the book was set in was intriguing. I constantly wanted to know more, and really enjoyed the obviously thorough worldbuilding of the author.
The not so good: It took a very long time to get to any sort of action. I really enjoy a lot of character development, but it seemed like the first 30% of the story involved getting the main characters in bed, then another 60% keeping them there, and just 10% of action at the very end. The word choices of the author were decidedly weird. It's like someone told her that ending a bit of dialog with "she said" was against the rules. Every single piece of dialog ended with either the character having "gushed, husked, squealed, or hushed". I had to look it up after husked followed so many statements, but it IS the second definition. After that, I looked up hushed, because I've never heard someone use it like so: "I love you," she hushed. Turns out that hushed is not synonymous with whispering. I hate to nitpick, because I did like the world enough to read the whole book, but it took a long time for me to be able to overlook these bizarre word choices. Also, languishing and lavishing are different, and you should never languish someone's lips with kisses. There was far more sex scenes than I anticipated in a New Adult book, to the point that I started to feel like it was getting in the way of the story. I think this might be the first book by this author, and I might try another one. I'd like it if the characters were a bit more two dimensional. They were all a bit sweet and ... well, just not really strong enough. Maybe that will come as they age? But for a bunch of college grads, they really reminded me of the 15 yr olds you read about in most books, only with sex.
Overall it was very interesting, and I will likely look at another book by this author, hopefully after she finds a good editor.