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The Pitch Thread - 2012, Summer Edition

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Initial post: Jun 1, 2012 12:58:59 PM PDT
So we did it... we blew up another pitch thread. :)

Here's the summer edition of the pitch thread, to get us through until it's time to start the 2013 thread.

I'll get started by posting an actual pitch... it's what I use to pitch my book to reviewers, which I've had success with. If you see something wrong... tear it apart. Go on... I can take it. :)

It started with a car accident.

What should have killed thirty-year-old Seth Alkirk, instead causes time to stop. He didn't know what was happening as he took in the frozen world around him. He didn't know why he was the only one who could move, or breathe, or see what was going on. But when a rift opens in the middle of the intersection, and a vicious twelve-foot-tall creature steps through into his world, Seth does know one thing for certain...

He has to run. Or die.

Enter Galadir, a parallel world where magic rules. Discover a kingdom in danger of being overrun by a massive army. And follow Seth as he discovers he's not human - but a Time Weaver who can change the balance of the coming war, if only he can learn to control his powers in time.

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 12:59:41 PM PDT
Ari says:

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:00:50 PM PDT
Congrats goes out to L. Jefferson for pinching the last post on the old pitch thread. I tried to snipe it with something good... but she beat me to it. :)

L. Jefferson, Thread Killer. It has a nice ring to it doesn't it? :)

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:00:56 PM PDT
Ari says:
Also LOL at L. Jefferson's last post on the old thread!

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:01:38 PM PDT
CLB77 says:
LJeff FTW! I almost snagged it.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:02:27 PM PDT
I hit submit when I saw your post Cara, but Kryssa beat me to the punch. :)

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:03:19 PM PDT
I'm in no position to critique pitches, but I do like the sound of your's Thomas. Can I post my one line pitch now? Or are you all still recovering from the thread supernova? :)

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:04:27 PM PDT
melkoberlein says:
The pitch thread is floating away just like Wilson...

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:05:37 PM PDT
CLB77 says:
Oh, and people with actual pitches, DO NOT BE AFRAID. We're actually kind of good at them.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:07:01 PM PDT
Yes! Post! :)

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:07:13 PM PDT
Hey.... mine is an actual pitch. :P

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:07:48 PM PDT
CLB77 says:
I was surprised that you can't edit posts after the thread dies either. It's all locked.

Btw, my baby managed to nap just until pitch implosion. Good timing.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:08:20 PM PDT
Last edited by the author on Jun 1, 2012 1:08:39 PM PDT
O.K., here it is....

"22-year-old Rio learns to use his uninhibited imagination as a weapon against metaphysical beings who manipulate children's thoughts to reach immortality."

I'm planning on using it on authonomy as the first thing people will see/read (aside for the title on the cover) Because of how important it is, and how it must catch reader's attention, I would like to hear all the opinions or the first impressions any of you may have.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:08:34 PM PDT
Hooray for convenient nap timeyness. :)

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:09:41 PM PDT
S. Taitel says:
Look at the shiny new thread! Let's scuff it up.

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:09:46 PM PDT
Ari says:
Gosh. These Twitter pitches are so hard! Here is what I just tweeted:

Being 15 is hard. Being 15 and a Gorgon and in love is impossible, especially after you've turned 8 people to stone.

I don't love it. I never love my tweet pitches.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:10:16 PM PDT
Well, it does intrigue. I don't see anything inherently wrong with it. :) It's good. I'd go with it.

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:11:17 PM PDT
Marianne says:
I just tried one too and hate it. Here's mine:

A brother and sister's plot to get rid of their mean housekeeper backfires and unbinds her magic. Evil Mrs. Grimm is here to stay.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:11:39 PM PDT
Thanks Thomas. That's great reassurance. Now I just have to get all my typos weeded out......

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:13:19 PM PDT
Ari says:
By unbind you mean "frees" I think that might have been a better word choice.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:13:21 PM PDT
I'm really going to be pushing myself to finish my full length pitch this week.

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:16:33 PM PDT
So I wonder if this would catch an agents eye:

"Would you cause a genocide to save a world?"

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:18:11 PM PDT
Marianne says:
Yes, "frees" is better, but it still has no zing. "Pitch your story in one line" sounds so easy... until you try it.

Posted on Jun 1, 2012 1:18:19 PM PDT
L. Jefferson says:
Sorry I snagged the last post, didn't even mean to. And I feel like such a schmuck because my last post was so lame.

In reply to an earlier post on Jun 1, 2012 1:19:35 PM PDT
Ari says:
It certainly has me wondering what you mean. Like would you sacrifice one world to save another? Or would you sacrifice one people to save another? Or something else?
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