Couldn't even finish it!
, October 3, 2013
I am sad to say that this book is very high on the list of examples of the worst writing I have ever seen! I cannot understand the great reviews. I have found that bargain books are often rated much better than they deserve, which is a real disservice to those of us that rely on an unbiased opinion. I can only think that friends, family, etc. must be trying to support these authors. I hate to think that people are being paid to give good reviews. Suffice it to say that when I start a book I finish it, even if I have to do a 'speed read'. It goes against my nature to quit on a book, but this book was written so badly and the dialogue was so completely unbelievable that I did just that. Nobody has conversations like those in this book. Here is a sample conversation. This took place 22% into this absolutely boring book. The scene is the first date Dani had with her `dream man' Ben:
I got into my car and prepared for my next encounter with the man of my dreams. As I drove to meet him, I became more and more amazed by the fact that I was in another town, away from my parents and everything I knew, driving to see a person I'd never held any sort of meaningful conversation with until this afternoon. What was I doing? No one knew I was here and how would I explain all of this later? Many things made me nervous, but this was about to cause a complete meltdown.
When I arrived at five fifty-three, no one was in the store and I could see Ben cleaning up for the night. Instead of just walking in, I knocked on the door as if this was his home, wondering why on earth I had done that.
Ben laughed as he approached. "You didn't need to knock, you know."
"Sorry, I don't know why I did that."
"Don't be sorry. Are you hungry?"
"If you want to wait here, I'll run across the street to Al's and grab us a pizza. There's some beer in the fridge behind the counter. Help yourself Danielle."
"Okay thanks." I responded, feeling giddy that he remembered my name.
Giddy, seriously? No kidding! This whole book is written this juvenilely! So she snoops through his store while he's gone, then the inane dialogue continues:
I couldn't believe I was in his store. I sat with a beer wondering how old he was, where his family lived, and where he lived. He probably had no idea that I couldn't legally drink alcohol and I took that as a good thing. I would much rather appear more mature than my age.
As I glanced out the windows at the front of the store, I could see Ben crossing the street with a pizza in hand. Could he really be into me? No one was ever into me. I was so used to being in the background behind Shannon that I was really unsure of this entire situation.
"Dinner is served," Ben said in his best British butler voice as he walked into the bookstore.
"Wow! Thanks for doing this. I didn't expect to be here tonight," I replied as I took another swig of beer.
"What were you going to do if weren't here?"
"Well, I came to Tallulah to find you, so I guess I was hoping we'd be together, but I really didn't think we'd end up in the same place." I realized how desperate I sounded and wished I could take it back.
"Are you kidding? I'd be home doing absolutely nothing if you hadn't walked in today."
"Really?" I said, tilting my head. "That makes me feel better. I mean, I so feel a bit strange driving all the way up here just to see if I could run into you."
Ben opened a beer for himself and sat down close to me. "Well, I'm flattered. So what's your story, Danielle Grayson?"
"I don't really have one. I live in Sugar Hill. I go to Gainsville State College. And I can't believe I'm sitting here eating pizza with you," I said as I smirked and reached for another slice.
"So you're still in college? I actually thought you were older. Maybe out of college by a year or so. I may be too old for you, but I'm really glad you're here eating pizza with me," Ben said as he grazed my hand with his. It was a quick touch, but one that left me wanting more.
"I'm really glad to be here, too."
"You know, not many girls would shove two slices of pizza down their throats on a first date. I like that."
Oh my God, he had called this a first date. . . . .
And on and on. Here is a sampling of some of Dani's inane comments or thoughts, "Nobody has ever brought me a flower!", "No one has ever asked me out!", "Could he really be that into me? No one was ever into me.", "I never get to go on dates.", etc. This book is BORING!! It's like a long boring monologue. Come on people, I know everyone has different tastes, but please be honest. This cannot be misconstrued as great writing by anyone. The saddest part is that the premise of this book had real promise. In the hands of a talented writer it could have been good.