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3.0 out of 5 stars Beautifully written. desperately needs to be EDITED., June 17, 2012
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This work is beautifully crafted. The author put so very much work into this, I hate to give it a bad review.

The writing is stunning, the characters lovable and memorable...

but the last 1/3 of the book desperately needs to be cut. This would be an astounding work of art, but there is simply TOO MUCH for the reader to endure.

the travails of Jane and her husband (I will not go into details in case people actually care and it's a spoiler) just need to be cut out. Most of the woes and tragedies that happen after that point need to be cut.

This cannot be enjoyed for the beautiful work it is when there are so many weeds clogging it. I loved the first 2/3, could not stop reading, couldn't put it down - the author's research is meticulous and spot-on...the writing is flawless...

but please, oh please, someone take pity on what could be a fine work, and EDIT IT!!!!

I stopped reading about 2/3 of the way through. Even I, who cannot do that as I have a reading compulsion, even I, couldn't wade through as this dragged on and on. I stopped caring about the characters that I had really come to care about...when you do not give the readers any relief of the depressing tragedies, they lose their ability to identify and to care.

When even minor characters have major tragedies that are described in numbing detail, the important things are lost.

please edit this book...

It is painful to give it a less than stellar review, as this could be such a fine and stunning work.

My apologies to the author. I can see what an enormous amount of work went into this, and I can see, also, why it was so very difficult to cut any of it out. But a good editor is badly needed here...an author can get too close to their own work to see that some of their precious story needs to be sacrificed. There are many, many, many (MANY) scenes in here that can be hinted at rather than given in excruciating detail...if you emphasize every single thing, the reader feels utterly bombarded.

The meticulous and hard work will show still, even if some chapters are cut away, some happenings mentioned in a single paragraph rather than a hundred pages.

still. Fine work. It will be glorious one day, when someone edits it.
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