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Interesting, but sloppy and incomplete,
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This review is from: SECTOR C (Kindle Edition)
The premise, doomsday by prion, is interesting, scary. I liked the characters (the good guys, I mean.) The science, well, I don't know enough about prions or cloning or extracting viable dna from ice-age mammals to know if developments in the novel are even viable in the near future.
The writing, well, there are a lot of speeches. Snappy it's not. Yet the really interesting stuff, like what, exactly, the vectors are (why didn't some people get infected?) and what's happening to the human population and did it spread outside of the quarantine area (those CEOs that died and their families, etc.) and what's happening with the "cure" (was the disease progressing in our heroine or was it arrested?) -- you know, the actual impact beyond millions of dead non-human mammals, the allusions to "things are gonna be different," -- all this stuff just wasn't there. It just jumped from being fraught to wishy washy. Like the author ran out of steam.
Then there is the silly stuff, like the weird ranks in the national guard and the president and not the governor calling them out, the CIA having anything to do with law enforcement (especially on US soil), and the entire dropped storyline -- you know, those dozen guys who burned down the fence and planned to storm Triple E, whatever happened with them? Thwarting international transaction by bureaucracy is also a stretch -- it would take too long and at by the point this transaction was caught by the government, the knowledge transfer would already have taken place. And what difference does it make anyway, once the government decided it was a matter of national security to ignore ownership (which makes sense), it means that anyone can come up with the alleged cure?
It's a lot of money for half a story.
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Initial post: May 10, 2012 5:28:15 AM PDT
I agree. The concept had a lot of promise, but as you said, it was as if the author got bored and just decided to end it without wrapping up loose ends. I felt that the story almost needed to be much longer, almost Stephen King like in length, though many readers would disagree with me on that.
Posted on Feb 24, 2013 2:52:48 PM PST
Last edited by the author on Feb 24, 2013 2:56:15 PM PST
Add to it the indiscriminate use of hyphens, most of which were improper usage. A lot of them could have been replaced with other forms of punctuation, namely commas. And then there's the good old propane tank that blows into fragments. Uh, that don't happen. Those tanks have rounded ends on them that are welded. It is a structural design so that if the tank should be excessively heated by fire and then explode, the design causes one or both of the ends to blow out of the tank. My favorite confusing sentence 'And until we do, there's no use worrying about it any more today when we know about it than yesterday when we didn't. Umm...didn't quite understand that one. And joined words like deadend. Dead end.
Why use 'non-pretentious' when there is 'unpretentious'?...and so many more. Thought I read at the end of the book that the author had worked as an editor???
Posted on Feb 24, 2013 4:41:17 PM PST
Kristen Fredericksen says:
It would be great if you could add something like "spoiler alert" in the title or at the beginning of your review. You didn't write any real spoilers, but you certainly gave away a lot of the story.
Posted on Mar 15, 2013 7:18:19 AM PDT
I have to disagree with your review. This is a work of fiction and is intended to be entertaining. If you get caught up in all the little details you miss the excitement of what you are reading. It almost sounds like you are looking for things to pick at and criticize instead of enjoying it. You should try immersing yourself into what you are reading instead of reading it word for word. Become one of the characters. Enjoy yourself. I am hoping that she will write a sequel. If not, no big deal, this one entertained me during my lunch break for several days and that is what reading is all about.
In reply to an earlier post on Mar 15, 2013 10:37:10 AM PDT
Lee Fleming says:
The "little details" can sink what otherwise might be a good tale. Dangling threads, improper use of grammar, impossible scenarios -- they all can be dealt with by a decent editor. If I'm going to pay for a book, I want at the very least a well-crafted book. This one is not. While you might be able to tolerate the stupid stuff in a novel, I can't unless the plot is so good I can ignore the flaws. In this case, the plot just doesn't do it. The drek sinks the book.
In reply to an earlier post on Aug 15, 2014 1:04:09 PM PDT
Nina O says:
I have to agree, it was entertaining. There were various issues, but they were not enough to take away from the enjoyment of the story.
I found it a fast read, and I got it for free through Bookbub.
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