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2.0 out of 5 stars Good premise, not ready for publication, December 8, 2011
This review is from: Skeleton Lake (Kindle Edition)
All the reviews I read made me want to read this book. I was so excited when I received my copy and couldn't wait to read it.

From the first chapter, I was completely lost. I had no clue what was being said. Maybe this was deliberate since Marlow was "drowning". So, I kept reading. The story began to work itself out over the next few chapters and I could see it more clearly.

The characters were not very deep. Even though the story was told through the eyes of Marlow, I just couldn't get into her, deep into her, to really feel any emotion towards her. Each character presented only provided more complication to the reader's ability to keep them straight. There was nothing discerning about the characters, nothing that made them want to be loved (or hated) by you. There were hints, don't get me wrong. But there was nothing that went deeper. I felt as I was reading this, it was just being "told" to me.

The story has a great premise, overall. Although the book is an easy read and the chapters are short, I just couldn't finish reading. I wanted to finish. I tried. But with the amount of grammatical errors, typos, cliches, and "telling, not showing", I just couldn't manage to finish. I got to Chapter 27. Maybe I will, one day, plow through the rest just so I know what happens.

Even though it's a self-pubbed book, with a little work and a couple more revisions it could have been a great read! I just feel it wasn't ready.
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Initial post: Dec 20, 2011 4:10:13 PM PST
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In reply to an earlier post on Dec 20, 2011 5:11:19 PM PST
LadyJai says:
I know it's published by Red Iris Books. But, really, who is Red Iris Books? Red Iris Books is SM Reine's baby. She is the owner and is doing all the marketing, formatting, and everything for the books she "publishes". I'm not knocking the small, independent publishers. She's just not one of the big publishing houses and just doesn't go through all the same steps as traditional publication. This book, if it's any representation as to all the books she publishes, lacks the editorial aspect of it. I stand firm on my review. It has a good story, but there is so much more work that it needed before it should have been published. Maybe Red Iris should take this as a learning experience and go through an editor before publication. It may find all those spelling and grammatical errors. It sure needs some more revision to make me "love" or "hate" the characters. They were just too flat. I know I am not the only one who has experienced this with her book. I guess I am just the only one willing to say it. I had written this review in hopes to better Angela's writing. I meant no ill feelings. Just wish she would have focused on more than just the fact I said "self-pubbed". There is so much more that she could gain help from!

Posted on Jun 14, 2012 7:28:14 AM PDT
I can't remember why I got this - I think from a Facebook comment about how good it was. I wish I had read this review first - it's spot on! I did finish the book - I think only to find out if it got better or worse. OMG, the errors. So, so many errors. . .proof positive that spell check can't be trusted (for instance, the inexplicable reason for changing The Hallows for The Hollows about 3/4 of the way in, good grief!).
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