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2.0 out of 5 stars good plot, little sophistication, February 26, 2011
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Most of the less positive reviews for this novel have complained of the language, the constantly recurring "F+++ you" that is used in place of actual dialogue throughout the book. My main complaint lies in the inaccurate or imprecise use of the rest of the English language, interfering with the imagery that would support the creative plot and draw the reader further in. "Hairpin anger," rather than "hairtrigger", for example. "He touched her hand lovingly" intends to indicate compassion and support from Dan- but it's a first date. Gently, maybe? The sheriff and others are seen as "plodding across the meadow" although it's a life and death chase. And finally, the editor should have caught the repeated use of "Alright" rather than the correct "all right." The characters and their experiences have good substance, but need more definition; the difference between drunk and sober Jane is key, but is not clearly fleshed out. The plot moves quickly and the interactions between Jane and Emily are believable for the most part, but Emily is a bit too sweet- not consistent with a 10 year old just coming off a major trauma. The hardest part to swallow, for me, was the scene in the crime scene house- that would NEVER be allowed. I also wondered at the apparent ease with which Jane stops drinking, and how quickly her withdrawal symptoms seem to subside. Overall, I think this writer has potential, and tells a fairly good story. In my opinion, she would benefit from more careful choice of verbs/adverbs, and less use of expletives.
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Initial post: Mar 2, 2011 10:20:34 AM PST
JustMeJulie says:
I plodded through the book primarily because I live in upstate New York and we've have one blizzard after another, and it was reading this or shoveling snow... What completely turned me off of this character was that at the end of the book they presented a "sampler" of Jane Perry's next adventure. The first few lines were about her knocking back whiskey and kicking ass in a bar. Is that going to be the theme of these books; she goes through her own version of recovery during each case she takes on? Not to mention that the detective was completely unlikeable.

In reply to an earlier post on Mar 3, 2011 9:53:07 AM PST
Dan Stone says:
Wow, you obviously missed the whole twist in the first scene of "Redemption" (the sequel.) No, Jane doesn't go through her own version of recovery during each case she takes on. But her character is based on someone who was abused and is an addict so that element follows through in "Redemption" as well. Why shouldn't it? As someone who has worked with addicts, I can assure you it doesn't just magically disappear. You carry those demons a long time. That's what makes Jane Perry so believable and REAL. Gee, it must be nice to live in a bubble and not be aware of that world out there that is not so "nice."

In reply to an earlier post on Mar 4, 2011 11:19:20 AM PST
shopper2010 says:
Wow, perhaps you should read the next book. If you had read further you would find out that she is NOT drinking & is involved in setting up a perp.

I LOVED Jane. Her character is real & believable.

Posted on Mar 4, 2011 5:16:40 PM PST
Harveytex says:
Come on! This is a piece of fiction which by definition is "a literary work based on the imagination and not necessarily on fact".

Posted on Mar 4, 2011 6:16:10 PM PST
Dan Stone says:
@Elizabeth....Sorry, but you are nitpicking here. Your comment: "He touched her hand lovingly" intends to indicate compassion and support from Dan- but it's a first date. Gently, maybe?

Seriously? I mean, how picky are you? You say the characters need more definition? Really??? Have you read modern fiction lately? It's full of flat, one-dimensional characters. Dewey's characters are fully three dimensional and come to life on the page. Did you and I read the same book? Incredible. And I wish people would stop with this ridiculous posting about the profanity in the book. You are absolutely all exaggerating when you say that Dewey uses profanity "every other sentence or word." Give me a break! Again, it's a tough cop crime thriller with an extremely damaged main character. How is Jane Perry supposed to talk????

In reply to an earlier post on Mar 13, 2011 11:02:47 PM PDT
I'm sure hard bitten police officers swear , well, like troopers. The f word tends to act as punctuation for many of the population. It is however as repetitive and unimaginative in print as it is to hear. Maybe it makes them seem 10% tougher. I remember laughing at a newspaper report about a chase which was aborted because most of the officers thought another yelled "Duck!" and they all jumped for cover. I don't think I'll read this book, I like my characters to be fleshed out.
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