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Good Imagination, Poor editing, Purient Child Porn
on August 17, 2014
I'm giving this novella two stars because I appreciate the author's imagination. The Cro-Magnon vampire idea and the Paleolithic world he describes, is a somewhat different approach in the genre, and I enjoyed getting to know the protagonist in the beginning. The blood and gore is part of the genre--it is a vampire novel after all.
However, I was quite disappointed at the level of editing. There are numerous errors in the text that could have been avoided by a good professional reader. Again and again I was stopped in the narrative by simple bad grammer, or, in one case, a sentence was attributed to the wrong character. Words were attributed to a person who had already left the scene. It was easy to figure out who should have said what, but it is disappointing in a "published" book. It's not that difficult to get an editor.
Another problem is the length of these novellas. They are short, and the ebook price is the same as for a full length novel. So you are getting 1/3 of a book and will spend three times as much for the same amount of product. I realize that art is hard to quantify and price, but it's kind of a chintzy marketing scheme.
Thirdly, and most significant to me, a scene occurs in the second "book" which is pure kiddy porn. I am not prudish nor do I dislike well done erotica, but there is a long passage in the second "chronicle" describing the abuse, beating, and repeated rape of a little girl. Again and again the narrator describes her degradation, becoming more excited at her brokenness, physical and mental. This passage continues for some time. It did not move the narrative of the story along, added nothing to the character development of the protagonist, but just seemed to be a long gratuitous, lascivious description of child rape and torture. Who is getting off on this? The author or the assumed reader?
After that I stopped reading.
Good imagination, poor editing, excessive prurience. This is the unfortunate side of self-publishing.