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- Publication Date: April 24, 2017
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- Language: English
- ASIN: B071V62VT2
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A Baby for the Alien Prince: Celestial Mates (The Alva) Kindle Edition
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1. The heroine: I just finished reading this novel and had to look up the heroine's name. Why? Because that is how forgettable she is. Margot, our leading lady, is a poor human who lives underground on Earth who only goes to the surface to clean offices and homes for the wealthy. Due to being from the poorer rungs of society she is not allowed to have a child. To overcome this, she joins Celestial Mates so that she can find a husband off planet in order to start a family. This sounds like a really great set-up but it all falls flat because Margot has zero personality besides thinking she's tough (when she's actually a constant damsel in distress) and making life changing decisions on a whim. This little habit of hers actually got a man killed. After spending less than a day on her new planet she decides she's not getting the attention she deserves so forces a man to take her to the place she was transported from. They end up being attacked on their way there and this is when he is killed. Being a kind soul she must have been torn up by this, right? Wrong. Before his body is even cold her husband (who had to rescue her) was eating her out near the carnage. Also, she seems to like to clean on her new found planet (where she is a princess) despite not showing much inclination for it when it was her job on Earth.
2. The Hero: Elorshin is an alien who needs a wife in order to have a child. His species are not breeding like they used to so he is forced to take an off planet wife which he really didn't want to do because there was then the risk he wouldn't be able to form a special bond called the Paritella (which is actually more like a horrific curse, more on that below). Despite his grievances, he accepts her as his wife and he instantly feels an uncontrollable urge to bone her (eye roll). The author tries to build up tension by having him constantly refuse to sleep with her because he doesn't want to sleep with someone if the Paritella connection isn't possible but this "conflict" felt very forced. It would have been much more believable and the payoff greater if he didn't have this quasi "love at first sight" thing going on. Elorshin was a decent character- loyal, courageous, smart- but, like the heroine, he's forgettable.
3. The Romance: What can I say about the romance? Well, there wasn't much of it. I didn't even get the impression that these two became friends, never mind soul mates. As soon as they meet there is an instant sexual attraction, they have some sexy times, and then they are in love and saying super sappy things to one another. The bonding moments outside of ones of a sexual nature are few and far between. There was one time when Margot hurt her ankle and Elorshin had to carry her on his back up a cliff. This could have been a really touching moment between them but instead the author treated it more like a comedic moment and it didn't seem to help grow the bond between them at all. Margot just came out of it looking like a burden.
4. The Sexy Times: Honestly, the intimate scenes kind of got repetitive. I think the major issue was that there were like three of them within a 24 hour period and they all consisted of the same thing (him eating her out). Elorshin didn't get any sort of satisfaction until the third time they fooled around so it also made the intimate scenes feel lopsided.
5. The Paritella: So Elorshin's species has this thing where if you mate with your soulmate then you will be able to feel how they feel and to hear their thoughts. One of Elorshin's hold ups about sleeping with Margot was that he was afraid he wouldn't be able to form this bond and apparently you only have one shot to achieve it and none of his species have been able to achieve Paritella with a human. I am a little confused how this bond is formed. Throughout most of the book it seems like if he has sex with her then that's the only shot he gets. If it fails, he will never achieve Paritella with his mate. But this seems to be contradicted later on when he bites her to mark her right after sex and this seems to be part of the process to trigger the Paritella. So couldn't he have slept with her and not bitten her if he didn't want to risk the Paritella not forming? Also, why would you want this? It sounds horrifying. Constantly feeling someone else's feelings and being able to intrude into their mind feels like such a violation. You would never have privacy ever again. Nothing will ever just be yours from there on out. That's a curse, not a blessing.
6. The Antagonist: The antagonist literally does not show up until 75% of the way through the book and there is no mention of him before this. Not even a "Oh gee, I really hate that mean ol' prince guy in that other House". He shows up out of nowhere and takes Margot (Elorshin allows this to happen because the antagonist is from a much stronger house). So this prince guy wants Margot because she was able to achieve Paritella and he wants to have that with a mate and he hasn't been able to achieve it yet (even though the book made it sound like you only have one shot at achieving it, which he's already tried before, and Margot has already achieved it with Elorshin, so there's no reason to believe it would work for her a second time). So his motives are pretty shoddy. Also, he has zero redeeming qualities because heaven forbid we try to give some dimension to the antagonist.
7. Wealthy People are Evil: Something I noticed that was a common theme throughout this novel was that rich people were not good in any way. Rich people were portrayed as snobby, self-centered, and unnecessarily greedy. It honestly came off like the author is bitter toward the wealthy and has a personal hang up. Characters with no redeeming qualities has always been a pet peeve of mine and having an entire class of people be reprehensible was a major turn off.
8. Genocide is Ok for Vagina: So when the evil prince took Margot, Elorshin went to two other Major Houses to recruit their help. Instead of showing up in a strong force to talk it out, they go straight to genocide. They cut off the power to the evil prince's kingdom and monsters immediately start attacking and killing his people. Keep in mind, this is an alien species that is having breeding issues so it's not like they can afford to lose these people. What really pissed me off though was how they tried to justify it. Elorshin and his prince buddies basically said "Oh, it's ok that these people are being slaughtered because they did nothing to stop their prince." That is bull. So all of those children and elders who were torn apart should have done something to rebuke their ruler? Also, how many of his citizens even knew he kidnapped her? It was stated that the evil prince wasn't that tight knit with his people and also Margot was there for less than a day. So chances are only a handful of his citizenry actually knew about it.
9 Elorshin Refuses to Help Rebuild the Kingdom he Destroyed: So Elorshin is offered the High Kingdom that he just helped to decimate. It would mean a lot more power for himself to help do some good and maybe try to fix the massacre he helped to invoke. Instead, he turns it down saying he is too loyal to the people in his own kingdom. Why not just move the people from the poor kingdom into the rich kingdom? With fertility rates low and the recent slaughter there has to be plenty of room so why not move your people where it is warmer, richer, and generally safer?
10. Time gaps and missing information: Several times throughout this novel there were either vital scenes missing or weird time gaps that probably should have been visited. For instance, Elorshin and Margot never get married. They are referred to as husband and wife but there is never a wedding scene or even a mention of marriage certificate. Also, Margot had to learn Elorshin's language which could have been a great bonding experience between the two but instead it is glossed over by basically saying a few weeks have gone by and because Margot is so "smart" she's practically learned the language. What a cop out. Unfortunately, there are a few occurrences of this in the novel. For instance, apparently his kingdom fell in love with Margot and may even like her better than him one day, despite their earlier reservations. This was not something that should have been glossed over, in my opinion. I wanted to see the people being distrustful of her and see the things she did to win them over. Instead I got, "she's awesome, so of course they like her."
11. The Paragraphs: So the concept of paragraphs at some point in this novel went completely out the window. By the end of the book virtually every sentence was being treated as its own paragraph. You can see the evolution of this in the free chapters available. Compare the paragraphs in the first chapter versus the third and you will start to see the formation of this; fewer and fewer sentences in each paragraph. The cynical part of me is wondering if this was done to bolster up the page numbers. Or maybe this is legitimately her writing style and I am being too critical.
12. Potential Lost: I think the thing that bugs me the most is that there was so much potential for this novel and I feel like the author was capable of doing so much more. Granted, this book was only a dollar but I would have gladly paid more if it meant a more developed, immersive experience. It seems the author puts out a decent amount of books in a short time frame. I think if she slowed down and took the time to flesh things out a bit more, this would have been a great novel. She has some good talent-interesting concepts, a nice flow, good grammar- but it feels like she is falling short of what she can truly achieve.