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- Print Length: 39 pages
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- Publisher: T S Paul; 1 edition (September 7, 2016)
- Publication Date: September 7, 2016
- Sold by: Amazon Digital Services LLC
- Language: English
- ASIN: B01LW2GW4L
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Born a Witch... Drafted by the FBI! (The Federal Witch Book 0) Kindle Edition
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Ok, the idea of a witch going to the FBI School is interesting. But, the author either glosses over too much, or didn’t give it any real thought. At least the writing is not horribly, like the last book of his I read (Forgotten Engineer).
For example, on the trip to the school, the "witch" and her agent escorts run into a bit of trouble with some locals. The bad guy puts his hands on Agatha (the witch), and is thrown for a loop. Then, we are ‘told’ that the bad guys are arrested. There is very little dialog, and it is not something we ‘see’ at all. It is just told “to” us as exposition.
The witch is supposed to be magically inept, “lopsided” is the word she used, but she has no problem rolling over everything that crosses her. No spell misfires, not any mistakes, just a few gestures and words, and a room full of supposedly trained agents are defeated.
Actually, that is the scene that really bothered me most.
Agatha shows up at school, and the greeter girl at the desk panics when she realizes she is facing a witch. She hits a button and glass walls fall down around Agatha to trap her, and then a flood of agents rush in with drawn guns.
Apparently, what happened was that the greeter girl didn’t get the full set of instructions, and winged it – by setting up a set of glass walls in the ceiling, and having a squad of agents on stand-by. Cause, you know, greeters have that kind of pull.
Agatha shatters the wall, and when a full squad of agents open fire on her, her shield sends the bullets bouncing all around the room.
What happened because of that? Nothing. Like I said before, “What, Really?” No bullets hitting anyone, or even puncturing any walls, or furniture. It is just glossed over.
Then Agatha goes out, and knocks the HUMVs (with machine guns) around that came when the alarm went off – cause you know, greeters always can have them on stand-by.
Then, it is all explained (why it happened), and Agatha goes to get her room sorted out.
Again, “what, really?”
Why was the greeter girl so panicked in the first place? No idea, you never hear from her. All she says in the story is that she “has her orders.”
No real dialog between the characters, no exploration of why the greeter girl had that many people on stand-by. No explanation of “why” a very large group of FBI Agents did not ask “why” they were waiting with guns on hand. Even if they bought in to the idea that a “dangerous witch is coming,” why in the world would they leave a civilian to meet the “dangerous witch?” Are the agents in that world lobotomized before being given guns?
Again, no dialog, just a narration of "that it was explained," without us 'hearing' any of the dialog.
When Agatha next goes along to the dorm to get her room, alone again, a different greeter/aide freaks out, fearfully gives her the room assignment. Then she goes up to her room and meets her room-mate.
Ok, again, "What? Really?" Did the “orders” change? Did they get explained? Did they get a full set? If so, why was this greeter so afraid? The other students had no idea of what was going on, so what happened with the greeter? Apparently the room full of students that were witness to the shootings just ran - no one posted to FaceBook, or Twitter, or anything.
Why? That isn't explained. Or, the author didn't give it any thought.
And, why in the world would the Special Agent John let her go in to the student dormitory “alone” after the first disaster? Are the agents in that world lobotomized?
And, speaking of him. I have actually met a few Special Agents, and not a one is an idiot. And, they don't take kindly to anyone criticizing the country - a lot of loyalty there. So, him sitting through Agatha's lecture about the "real" history, and the abuse of the supernaturals by the governments, and just accepting it... not realistic. At all. Unless he was just humoring her to get on her good side, that is not a 'real' agent. He would not accept her into the FBI Academy. The situation lacks credibility.
Really, it looks like the rest of the story will be very “Mary Sue.” The protagonist is the only one with any brains, and all the power. I don't understand him writing about a witch that is "too cool for school" - that is going to school!
Unless Mr. Paul really improves his skill, the full book will be a waste of a good idea.
I might have been warned by the cover composition, and the fact that these books are only available in e-format.
The concept is a good one: magic users (Paranormals) are a sizeable group in every country, and have been at the center of each historic conflict since the Great War (WWI in our history), which they call the Great Purge. Because the Allied victory in this war involved decimating the vampire clans in Europe (including those allied to Britain), the paranormal community is extremely leary of coorperating with government agencies like the FBI.
Agatha Blackmore is not only a witch, she is the most powerful witch of her generation. She is also a loose cannon with a tendency to commit wild magic with unintended consequences. Who better, then, to finally step up to work for the FBI? If her magic goes awry, as expected, at least she'll not be anywhere near the witch community.
This prequel tells Agatha's back-story: the "incident" when she was six that terrified her widowed mother and her aunt, and brought into her life the familiar Fergus, a My-Little-Pony-sized unicorn that talks—and cusses. The story reveals her strong bent toward law enforcement, and provides some reason to why she would comply with her family's desire to have her out of the community.
It also establishes the bias and bigotry of the FBI Academy's director and staff, not only toward Agatha, but toward other paranormals like her Were roommate Cat. The characters each have their own voice and set of quirks, including the politically-incorrect Fergus.
The novella would have been an enjoyably quick read if I hadn't spent so much time documenting the dauntingly numerous instances of apostrophe-abuse and number disagreement. What writer old enough to have a wife, as T.S. Paul's bio indicates, does not know that plurals do not have apostrophes, and possessive nouns (except pronouns) do? I reported dozens of such errors from this short 55-page novella.
Paul is lucky I ignored the apparent inability of the author to use commas; I would have still been reporting them if I had not. Leaving them out makes the reader work so much harder to figure out who is speaking to whom.
Editing and punctuation are definitely a problem but that's not the worst of it. Rank stupidity in every character other than the protagonist and her grandmother is unrealistic, fantasy notwithstanding, and doesn't make for a compelling group of characters to populate the series. In addition, the writing is flat and simplistic. Action scenes are beyond dull and almost written as a recitation: this happened, that happened, it's done. Action scenes are supposed to be compelling, exciting and tense for the characters and readers alike.
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Getting the first book in a couple days..worth having them and definitely will re-read them