Briksanna's Sacrifice: A Novel of Four Realms: Book One Kindle Edition
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Once I started this, I was convinced I was having issues reading it because I was tired. I put it down and came back to it in the morning. It didn't get any better.
Here's an example from the book:
"She was proud of him in that moment for his trust in her. He did followed her instructions without pleading. She was astounded he held her in such regard to put their lives in such a vulnerable position."
There are similar writing issues on every page.
I really wanted to like it. And yes, I will admit I judged this one by the cover. The books I read that have a beautiful cover are usually the ones where authors invested in a good editor as well. This was an exception.
It was hard to keep up with what was going on in the story, and I really tried. I feel as if it has potential, and I would be willing to give it another go once it has been fixed.
The very first sentence is a good indicator of what is to come: "'You will never have him!' she screamed; spitting out what little was left in her mouth." Yes, first sentence, and already misuse of punctuation and a confusing last half of the sentence. No, you never do clearly learn what was in her mouth...saliva? words? loose teeth from being beaten? Who knows...
The writing alternates between hilariously overblown "bodice-ripper" dialogue reminiscent of a badly written romance from the '70s and flat modern American verbiage which seems especially awkward when read in close juxtaposition to the overblown hyperbole.
A few examples:
"Exhausted, she closed her eyes and waited for peace to fall upon her. Speaking frailly, 'I know the truth as so do you. The Prophesy does not tell of my commitment to your Master only to bear the love of Lord Drakkoon. There is nothing that you can say or do to me that will convince me that this monster you serve could be the person I would freely give my love to.'"
"Steeling herself for another verbal battle with her tormentor, she pressed on with her argument. 'I am not to be forced, for to do so would forfeit all, and death will be your Master's ruler, as the Great Seer Vakgdona spoke not long ago.'"
"'Pledge yourself to my Master, heart and soul; body and spirit, giving him that which he desires the most, a son? Something so profound, that in all the four realms, only you, princess can give him. By him you can have your son, the prophesied instrument of peace. By saying yes, to my Master, the campaign against the Four Realms will cease allowing peace in the land.'" (All mispunctuation is verbatim.)
"Frowning, at her thoughts, surely she smelt what was rotten within him that carried the putrid scent of a decayed sprit (sic) permeating the air each time he entered her cell. She was going to rip that spirit from his very being the moment she had a chance."
"'The prophesy is not inevitable for me as you would think, but certain death for your Master it speaks of,' she screamed at him straining in her bonds. 'There is no future for your Master!'"
Editing and proofreading seem nonexistent. A few examples:
"Escape seemed possible with despair beginning to cloak her being. He was insistent."
"How much longer could her she survive?"
"...she was filled with an unknown power like she had never felt before; reviling (sic) in the strength of the power she now carried, assuring her again she had purpose; reminding her she was the First Princess of Prophesy." (Note to the author: "reviling" and "revelling" are spelled similarly but are not interchangeable.)
I could go on with many, many more examples, but I think you get my drift. And this was in less than two full chapters. E-books will never replace paper books as long as dreck like this reminds us of the value editors and proofreaders give the reading public when they weed out books like this.
(And I'm sorry if this review hurts the author's feelings, but if you publish -- even self-publish -- a book, you put yourself out there for honest criticism.)
Very well written and could not put it down. I don't usually read this type of book,
but it was so interesting as to what Bricksanna was going to do, I just got so
engrossed in it. Good reading and very well written.
While I loved the story I would have loved a faster pace and I would have liked to feel more invested in the characters. While the information was given I felt slightly disconnected at times.
Overall I would recommend this book to other to read.
Like how this book connected with the different characters in the book. Sometimes the book had me confused on who was talking? Overall it was a good book. Bri is a strong women and hides from love.....then over comes it. Wonder what will happen on the second book....what is all her family like?
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