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For a short story of this caliber, It should have been a lot shorter.
on March 12, 2014
I felt like I had to trudge my way through the first few pages, this being before I knew it actually had (two) chapters. And within the first chapter, I literally had to force myself to read it, I fought the temptation to start skimming through it. But I could not offer quality review if I did, so grudgingly, I found chapter two.
How the writer managed to cram three, maybe four erotic scenes into the first chapter, is beyond me. The first one was like, "They could have done better", The second was a bit like the first, and the third was like a combo of the first two. Nothing new stirring the pot for these guys, they are just going through the motions after 500 years.
I would imagine these guys just got tired of trying new things, and are just sticking to a routine.
The story kicks into gear in the second chapter, finally.
If I had known this, I would have skipped directly to chapter two. But even then, it still would have been a waste of time, because the story, at this point began to feel rushed, and there was little information given. So figuring out what was going on was completely lost. And then the next thing you know, it's over. So much for a story.
I can't say this was the worst NN I have read.... Wait a minute. Let me re-phrase that.... This is not one of the worst, but it definitely is not one of their best. But I guess there is a reason they are offering certain books for free. And it's clearly not to get you into their collection, in hopes that you'll want to buy. NN's are a hit and miss, so I would not be likely to pay for any of them.