Top critical review
1.0 out of 5 starsI would not recommend. i did put a LOT of spoilers.
Reviewed in the United States 🇺🇸 on September 30, 2014
A friend of mine told me about this book. Figured I would give it a try. I normally read YA paranormal romance novels.
I only had enough patients to read the first (8 chapter) short story in the book. It’s called First date.
I read this on my phone through the kindle app.
To start this review I would like to say in my opinion this story has potential.
Spoiler alert
This story starts off in a bar setting. This girl Alice is there with her sister and her sisters BF, but sits at the bar alone. OK!
A guy comes up asks to buy her a drink no big deal right. Wrong she looks to make sure he is talking to her then comes out and asks him if he is talking to her. Hello she just looked around and saw no one in the area. Why is she surprised her sister isn't watching her? Her sis is with her BF after all. They get there drinks he asks her to a Christmas ball. They all have leant on something.
She goes back to sis. Sis noticed that she was talking to Derek but doesn't seem concerned so why was Alice worried?
Spell check could come in handy next time.
She gets up early to swim and the only person mentioned as being there is her friend Ben, until the end of swimming practice and 2 girls are there and Ben vanishes.
I thought this part is funny. She just finds out that she is a stopgap for him from Katy who says that he just broke up with Jessica (And how she is happy because Jessica was annoying) and she has made many comments about how this is the first time she has been asked out but now at location 166 she says “she was a stopgap, they would probably become friends. She had been played that card a lot of times.” How could she have played that card a lot if this was the first guy to show interest?
“One day she would leave her nails alone, one day.”
“To tempt passing trade”
She was shy when Derek came up to the bar and yet she says that she has never been shy or embarrassed before when he runs to catch up to her in town.
A week later starts chapter 3 Christmas day. “Burgundy dress fitted at the bodice and then loose up to the knee.” Shouldn’t it be down to the knee when your describing a dress top to bottom?
Derek shows up and she is thinking he could be her prince?
In the bathroom at the dance she over hears 2 girls talking about how Lucy just broke up with Derek for being annoying. Wait I though he broke up with Jessica. Who is Lucy?
She runs into Ben as she leaves the rest room and we find out she has a crush on him for as long as she can remember. That would have been nice to know in the beginning when he was first introduced.
Derek and Alice dance talk she asks to go home around midnight he stops at a church she fights this feeling to pray while thinking she used to be religious but isn't any longer, Then thinks thank you god as they walk out.
Derek uses his manors, opens doors, and seems very polite but lets her walk herself to the door after kissing her cheek in the car, Never getting out himself.
Good thing he stays in the car though, because the story ends with her getting up to the apartment that she lives in to find Ben lying on the floor in front of her door. They make out he leant his head on hers then they make out some more.
leant should have been looked up by the author. http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/leant just in case your interested i looked it up.
