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Monster Mashup - Spooky Short Story Omnibus Kindle Edition
"Depth of Lies" by E. C. Diskin
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This is a great collection of short stories for your middle school child. I think 3rd grade and above, any younger than that, and I think it may be a bit too much for them.
Some of the stories are true horror stories for younger children. They reminded me of my absolute favorites as a child. Some of them aren't scary at all, but make children think about the consequences of their actions.
Hobgoblin Horror had to be my favorite out of the bunch. It was great from beginning to end, and left you with a great tingly feeling when the story was over. The perfect little horror story for any child. Nothing graphic, nothing gory, but completely scary.
I would recommend this to any child who has an adventurous spirit and likes to get the chills from time to time. One of the better spooky story books for younger children that I have read in a while!
Briefly, the recommended stories from this collection for horror readers:
-Monster in the Mirror
-Hobgoblin Horror (ending when the wristwatch is found)
Overall: For the most part, the author's stories are well-paced. There are a few typos, but not so overwhelming an amount as to keep the reader from enjoying the stories. The style of writing is perfect for the YA reader, and those who like R.L. Stine's works may find these pieces appealing as well.
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More in-depth review on each story:
*Infinite Reflections: I found this story more hurmorous than scary. I would recommend that there be some punctuation added to the second paragraph; as it stands now, it reads like a run-on sentence. A re-read through some of the dialogue wouldn't be a bad idea either, as some of the characters stated reactions don't match up with the punctuation in the dialogue itself.
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*Bloody Marcy: This story could also benefit from some punctuation changes within the dialogue. For example: "I saw her - at least I think I did. It was so fast, I'm not sure." There's no urgency indicated there, no reason for a reader to provide any more inflection than the evening weather report to what should be exclamations of fear. As for an overall impression, the tale reads like a warning against pulling pranks more than a startling tale of horror.
"Awe, that game's stupid." - Awe should be "Aw".
"Under my breathe" - breathe should be "breath".
The second paragraph at the 14% mark has had its beginning edited out for some reason.
"Your turn Marcy" - there should be a comma after turn. Whenever addressing a person, a comma is needed. It makes all the difference between "Let's eat, Grandma!" and "Let's eat Grandma!"
"shinning in our faces" - shinning should be "shining".
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*Monster in the Mirror: A read-through is something I would definitely recommend on this one. It makes mention of mom fixing lunch, but she never hands anything to Nate, or places a plate before him. Yet on the very next page, Nate's "fininshing" his lunch? And while he was eating a lunch we were never told he was consuming, he managed to see the cracked plaster walls through the Wolverine Annual he was reading in an attempt to avoid conversation with his mother. This would be the best place to clarify the "lunch" issue: having a note about mom handing Nate his lunch after she says he's just getting adjusted, and noting that as he puts down the comic so he can eat his lunch, he takes in the cracked plaster and warped wood.
This type of error occurs again at 19% when Nate and Danny "head downstairs" to find a mirror, but when they unpack a box to find one, they're on the landing. (No one would leave a box on a staircase landing unless that landing was enormous.)
The ending of this one is actually spooky, so I definitely recommend this piece out of the set.
"a decent night sleep" - should be "a decent night's sleep".
The last sentence at 17% - it reads as though the nightmares come from the staircase, but I don't think that's what was intended. Adding a "the" after "and" would clarify that.
"Oaky, you ready?" - Oaky should be "Okay"
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*No Way Out: There are several parts of this which seem to contradict statements made directly preceeding them. For example, at 26%: "With each step, the floor beneath me creaked. Yet at 28%, where the narrator has fallen down the stairs into the room with the creaky floor: "The floor was cold, metal, and sticky." Yet the description of the falling is a description of a room the narrator fell into *after* falling through the floor of the creaky room. Unfortunately, that's not entirely clear, since it's only stated that the *stair* "gave way like wet cardboard". In short, the author would do better to consider reading through the story to look for issues like these. Confusion will jar the reader from the tale, destroying the suspension of disbelief. And in a horror story, that's completely detrimental to the atmosphere being set.
But directly following those statements, the narrator is groping around for the dropped camera. Unfortunately, the author chose not to take advantage of a golden opportunity to set the reader on edge with descriptions of the narrator's "findings". We're told that the battery case has a crack in it (which the narrator can see without any light in the room), and there's a mention of there being "gunk" on the narrator's hands. Though that indicates it's possible the battery case leaked, that's such a mechanical explanation for what could have been a delightfully spooky scene.
This isn't one I'd recommend. The ending isn't what I originally expected when starting the story, but it's also a bit more grotesque than I would have expected. After all, they didn't have a knife, or a way to heat anything. And if you read it, you'll understand - and I hope you take a moment to think about that.
come by early and setup - early should be "earlier" and setup should be "set up". "Setup" is a noun, used in reference to how a gaming center might be set up, and usually used in something like, "Man, this is a sweet setup you've got here!" "Set up" refers to the act of setting something up, which is the way you've used "setup".
At 27%, the sentence referencing the camera shouldn't have commas before and after "still-recording".
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*Steven, Space Stowaway: The author makes a point of telling us that this was published in a preteen/teen SF magazine in June 2010. But there's no monster in this, so no reason for it to be in a "Monster Mashup". It is an amusing flash fiction in the SF genre, but not terrifying in any respect, so not something I'd expect to encounter in a horror collection.
"Sixty of that Mom's stuff." - There should be an "is" between "that" and "Mom".
"blown out the airlock" - There should be an "of" between "out" and "the".
"what might had been" - "had" should be "have".
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*The Price of Friendship: This is another story that isn't outright spooky. The idea of the "trader" and what he can do *is*, but the way the story is executed, it comes across more as a depressing morality tale about valuing friendship.
"Ummm, Okay." - The "okay" shouldn't be capitalized.
"I laid awake" - "laid" should be "lay", as the past tense of "lie" is "lay".
"with this trademark smile" - should be "with his trademark smile"
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*Hobgoblin Horror: This one continued past where it should have ended for maximum effect. If the author had left it "and like I said, it never left his wrist." then the story would have had a much more chilling effect. We already know from Fitch's account what lengths the hobgoblin will go to, so spelling it out blatantly only lessened the impact of the tale.
"lineoleum titled floor" - titled should be "tiled"
"black & white" - An ampersand shouldn't be used in prose. You should spell out the word "and".
"Hey Mr. Fitch" - direct address comma issue again.
trouble up there. "He - The end quotation mark should be after the period, with a space following it preceding "He".
"Steve scowled" - Who's Steve?
"like 100 or something" - 100 should be written out: "one hundred"
'come on let's go.' What if we... - The end quote should actually appear after "here?" since the entire two sentences were part of his remembered statements.
"great story Mr. Fitch." - direct address comma issue again.
"almost a complement" - homonym issue: here, it should be "compliment". The two words don't have the same meaning.
"me to tell yeah" - yeah should be "you"
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*Rolling Leprechauns for Change: Again, this is a story that doesn't really have any horror elements in it. The story could more appropriately be placed in the humor genre; even the narrator realizes that there's humor in his predicament as a result of his actions. The downside to this one is that it feels like another morality tale: be prepared to accept the consequences of your actions.
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*Hide-n-Go Coffin: This one was actually sufficiently creepy. But it is clear once he leaves the coffin what's happened, which does lessen the impact of the "fright" aspect.
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*Brother's Keeper: Mildly chilling, this story's only monster is one brother's inhumanity to the other. The only reason I'm hesitant to recommend this particular tale is the telegraphed ending.
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*Grandpa's Suits: This one is a more complete mixture of creepy and morality. The ending wasn't completely revealed before the party even began, but a good bit of it was. Some readers may find the near-rape far more affecting than what eventually happens to the would-be rapist. One thing that I question is why Chad's basketballs continually disappeared when placed in the closet. Given the fate of the would-be rapist, Chad's actions are now suspect. (When you take into account the fact that another couple entered the closet before Zoey, the indication is that the suits only react to bad things or people.)
The morality, of course, lies in not putting oneself into a compromising situation, and on the "flip side" of that: not being a rapist. The twist in this one is, of course, that what might have been considered a "monster" in another context is actually the savior here. But I can't help but feel cheated, especially since there's no plausible way that the closet - or even the woolen suits it contained - could have completely muffled Zoey's attempts to stop Justin. The author even acknowledges Zoey's state of mind by commenting on Tammy's reaction to seeing her once they opened the closet door. In the very next sentence, the author comments about the other guests' "wide eyes", indicating that they had heard the commotion from their side of the door and simply stood by to allow her to be raped. Depraved indifference *does* constitute monstrosity, and standing outside a door where they could clearly hear a struggle, and (though we're not told of any) likely Zoey's screams, certainly qualifies, making them little better than the would-be rapist, if at all.
I'm afraid I have to withhold a recommendation on this one for many reasons, not the least of which is that the majority of the characters are no better than the obvious antagonist. Despite this, the story does have much to recommend it, not the least of which is a quick pace that sets the scene. I've no complaints about the style of writing in this piece.
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*Super Zombie Juice Mega Bomb: This one is a lead-in to the novel that follows the same zombie theme. As a stand-alone piece, however, it's something I would recommend adding more story to (which is probably why the author turned it into a novel).
The pace is a bit too fast, leaving you feeling like you're in a speeding car on a highway. In addition to that, the ending feels like a deus ex machina with the pair of kids finding the perfect weapon to kill the zombies that overran their town. If the zombie genre appeals, I'd suggest checking out the longer version. I admit I haven't read the novel-length form of this tale (yet), but given that it is a more elaborate - and therefore, likely to be far more generous with details and story development - version of this story, there's a very strong probability that it would be more enjoyable than the short marketing piece included in this collection.
"to go camping?" She - "she" should be lowercase here. This is likely an issue with auto-correct, since it doesn't know how to differentiate for dialogue.
"Hey Miss" - direct address comma issue again.
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