Remember This (A Romantic Comedy) Kindle Edition
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The other off-putting thing was the grammar. I should have quit when I read the word queue when "cue" was certainly intended. I should have quit when I read the sentence "Her and Scott went to the airport early." I kept plugging away though, until I realized that I felt like I was watching a train wreck.
Read the sample before purchasing! The opening with the pantyhose is by far the best that I read. If you are still engaged at the end of the sample, then perhaps you will enjoy the book. You get a good sense of the characters at the end of the first chapter and through the second chapter. Just because I gave up doesn't mean you won't enjoy it. We are all different.
I also had issues with grammar/usage - queue instead of cue; phrases like 'her and I'; at one point, Lucy proclaims that she is appalled, but she is clearly excited and in approval, so I have no idea what the author was trying to say on that one... I can overlook a few typos, but this was consistent enough to distract from the story.
My biggest complaint, however, was in the storytelling approach. The first person narrative just wasn't very effective - I was being told about the story rather than being part of seeing the story unfold. The transitions were awkward - I felt like I was frequently being told 'two weeks later' or 'now it is fall' instead of the story naturally flowing around the advancing time. Dialog was scarce and stilted: most of us speak in contractions. I also felt like the foreshadowing was more telegraphing - not exactly subtle.
The characters became more interesting and the story more fun once it was past the half-way mark, although it ended in predictable fashion. I'm interested in the author's future work if it comes complete with an editor/proofreader.
First, the writer must coax the reader into caring about the characters and the outcome of the story. For me, giving a damn about the principals was impossible.
The main character is a self-absorbed workaholic who spends far too much time bemoaning the fact that her marriage is falling apart and no time at all trying to repair it. Rather than finding solutions to the problems that she admits to having created in her marriage, she devotes her time and attention to her job and a flirtation at work with a man who is obviously creepy and who shows clear signs of becoming a stalker.
Her husband is a walking-talking stereotype – the “pretty playboy” who changes his ways thanks to falling in love with the “right woman.”
The peripheral characters are a bunch of spoiled rich kids who drink themselves stupid, screw around, are completely devoid of morals, and lack any substance whatsoever.
Second, there must be a believable (and not terribly predictable) plot.
Oh, wait. Is this science fiction?
No? Not science fiction?
In that case, there must be at least a modicum of authenticity to the plot.
That believability is either non-existent or I seem to have missed something.
The main character throws a wine bottle at her husband’s head, giving him amnesia.
OK, stop me if you see this coming -- but seriously?
This is spousal abuse. The doctor who treats him – neighbor or not – is legally obligated to report this. Also, a doctor is legally forbidden from colluding with a patient to deceive someone. Again, it’s the law. Of course, in this world there are none of those silly realities to deal with. The explanation of why the doctor doesn't report it is as thin as the idea that a woman could chuck a wine bottle at her husband with enough force to give him amnesia.
What transpires after the wine bottle incident is so predictable that I jotted down my prediction and gave it to a friend. I was quite disappointed to discover that I was spot on in my expectation.
Third, unless your target audience is 13-year-old boys, drop the potty humor.
“I know no door is thick enough to block the sounds emanating from the bathroom,” and, “I just practically s*** myself during my mudbath” are lines that are certain to have the teen boy set rolling with laughter. Me? I find it childish and offensive – and I’m not easily offended.
In my mind, there is little difference between the blatant potty humor in this book and those musicians who have no substance in their lyrics and who, as a result, resort to using foul language to get attention.
On a personal note, blatant disregard for the English language drives me to the point of book burning.
If you’re going to write a book, invest in spell check. Take an English course – even a remedial one will do.
Please! If you really don’t know the difference between “were” and “where,” and if punctuation eludes you, and if you haven’t a clue what verb/tense agreement are – find another line of work!
The readers of the world will thank you for it.
Most Recent Customer Reviews
its pretty realistic at least for me ...from their silly immaturity moments that were fun, to their serious moments, it was a good thing to read ahahaha
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