- File Size: 2075 KB
- Print Length: 41 pages
- Publication Date: October 1, 2012
- Sold by: Amazon Digital Services LLC
- Language: English
- ASIN: B009KRY460
- Text-to-Speech: Enabled
- Word Wise: Enabled
- Lending: Enabled
- Amazon Best Sellers Rank: #2,156,273 Paid in Kindle Store (See Top 100 Paid in Kindle Store)
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The premise is a stock one in science fiction, and nothing about its presentation in this story stands out. The story is too long, the dialogue is too formal and thus sounds unnatural, the authors outright tell us what the protagonists are thinking and feeling, and the twist at the end is a pointless cliché that does not fit with the rest of the story.
First, I should say that I have a strong bias against novellas. They occupy an unhappy space between true short stories and novels, and although some are great, most tend to end up being short stories that spend too much time meandering. In this case, although the story was labelled a short story, its multiple chapters led me to consider it more of a novella, and it suffers from the lack of focus that many novellas do.
The story has one point with a twist at the end, but because of the amount of time the authors take to deliver their message the entire thing struggles to hold the reader’s interest. There’s too much padding, and the entire work suffers for it. For a short story to work, every sentence has to be on point and, as stated, the novella tends to encourage authors to plug in excess words. It’s a trap that many writers fall into.
Second, the dialogue in this work is overly formal. On the one hand, all of the characters are highly educated individuals, but on the other the dialogue sounds like the authors speaking, not the characters. This drains the life from the character and renders them sterile instruments whose sole purpose is to deliver the authors’ message.
Third, the authors have a habit of telling the reader what the characters are thinking. Although doing so is appropriate under certain circumstances, it is usually better to show the reader what the characters are feeling through physical reactions and their interactions with other characters. Although there is a good amount of this in the story, the authors still give away too much by outright telling the reader how the two main protagonists feel about each situation.
Finally, the twist at the end of the novel does not fit with the rest of the story. It transforms what was a relatively uneventful traipse through a common theme in science fiction into a different but similarly uninteresting one in a throwaway paragraph at the end. I will not reveal what the twist was, but it was tacked on and added nothing to the story. Instead of knocking me on my hind end, it made me roll my eyes.
It is difficult to write a good short story, and the authors of this one failed to do so. They handicapped themselves by writing something closer to a novella and a short story and inherited all of the problems that come from doing so. I give it a 2/5.
Six years old Harrison Avery is considered a prodigy. Living in a world suspicious of intelligence and he is in danger. His parents live in fear of his extraordinary IQ being discovered, they will do anything to hide it. But they find it is hard to hide when they are under constant surveillance.
I really loved young Harri. His parents are loving and very protective of him, they will do what it takes to protect him. A well written short story. The characters are well developed, the plot is original, and the story moves at a rapid pace. But a lot goes on and there were many, many "edge or your seat moments". I feel that Surveillance is a great read for those who love sci-fi and psychological thrillers.
*This book was given to me as a gift
This is a beautifully-written and rather disturbing tale.
Lynette Sofras has already won considerable acclaim for her rather special romance stories but this is, as far as I know, her first excursion into science fiction. I believe this may be Alexander Sofras' first published work. And what a team they make. This story is gripping from the first page. It has all the sophistication of Lynette's previous work, but with the added spice of Alexander's ideas.
I was intrigued and delighted with it. It is one of those stories that leaves you thinking about it long after you have read it.
Well done Alexander and Lynette! I hope this is only the first of many wonderful stories from the Sofras team.
I look forward to reading more books from this genre :)
To anyone who likes the sound of this book, I HIGHLY recommend and dont let the fact its a short story put you off. Its well worth a read!
I would highly recommend this to any sci-fi lovers and I really hope they continue in this genre (as well as the romance works from Lynette).