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Continuity problems for me
on December 19, 2012
First I am glad this book cost me no more than .99. I would be rather miffed if it had. This was another instant love triangle (one that made you wonder why there was even a love triangle), hot guys, inexperienced girl who is so beautiful but doesn't even know it book. It almost felt like it was a bit trying to be a non paranormal form of twilight, and it did reference twilight a lot too. Nat talks in the beginning of her boring eyes, hair, and pale skin, and then there is more talk in the book of her clumsiness. Made me feel like the character was written to be similar to Ms. Swan.
Then there was the continuity problems that made it hard for me to read through the book smoothly because I kept stopping and having to wonder if I read that right or not because it didn't match up with things said earlier. Examples being:
She is not allowed to dye hair, not allowed to wear makeup, but then starts wearing makeup later in the book with no mention of the earlier no makeup rule. When she mentions she isn't allowed to wear make up it is because her parents hate artificial anything. She doesn't even fight it, but then all of a sudden there are many scenes with messed up masscara or she is too tired to wash her make up off. But Nat, I thought you didn't wear makeup? I could let it go for a party like it was a one time thing but it would be nice if the author wrote in how it was an exception or something.
I was confused by the apparent Mom who doesn't allow her daughter dye her hair or wear makeup but then doesn't care that her daughter is hanging out with two boys all night long, at their house. Unsupervised. Yes, Nat is 18, but again she is not allowed to dye her hair or wear makeup. . . .it just doesn't fit. Needed more explanation to get me to believe this Mother daughter relationship.
There was a part that brought up how she was suppose to go to a homecoming meeting after school but then there is no mention of it, instead she goes from school to work. At least write in that she forgot to go again, or something.
A character mentioned in the beginning starts off named Benjamin, then suddenly is named Gabe at the end of book.
Alec and Demetri's mom walks out on them and dad dies when they are young but no mention of who took care of them, if they were in the system, a guardian, if they get emancipated, etc. Instead it was just bam they have a career at 16 and are Rock Gods. Needed more understanding of their history here.
She had a "sad little free phone with its pink cover" that later turns into a blackberry. To me a blackberry PDA would be more than a SAD little free phone, even when compared to an Iphone. My phone which doesn't surf the internet or hold music is a SAD little free phone.
So on the first day she meets the boys she tripped twice. the book goes on to have time pass " by the end of their first week..." Then later when it is suppose to be a few days later Alec states " you tripped over your own two feet twice yesterday". Again I am sitting there pausing going. . .wait how much time has passed, I thought that happened a while ago.
The story line is what it is love triangle, brothers, instant love, nobody girl the dream come true of the hottest guys around. That alone I might have given this book 3.5-4 because I still wouldn't recommend someone else read it. Add in all the errors in the story itself, or the details left unexplained and that is why I am giving it 2 stars.