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Bad Writing Due to No Professional Editor. What is "Whence" I ask? (F Grade)
on December 28, 2012
This Beautiful Thing (Young Love #1) by Amanda Heath has a sexy, eye catching cover, interesting blurb and has been in Amazon's top 100 romance for weeks now. This Beautiful Thing should be titled- This Beautiful Trainwreck of Horrible Writing. Another case of a self published book with no editing to speak of. It makes me wonder if the author has any real basic writing skills because the amount of misspellings, lack of punctuation or incorrect punctuation placement is beyond glaring and ridiculous.
Not even three pages in, I read this- "She squeals in my ear and I whence."
What is a "whence"?
Also, commas can be a writer's friend. This author apparently doesn't like commas. Example:
"What the f_ _k Declan." Ahem, should have a comma before Declan.
Sentences that make no sense based on a word that makes no sense, including run-on sentences thanks to the word, "and":
"I feel him tense above me AND his movements get jerkier AND then he's kissing my lips as I shallow his yell of pleasure."
What is "shallow his yell of pleasure"?
If an author can't use a professional editor, why would I want to finish a book, let alone spend my money on it that has far too many editorial and grammar errors to count? You insult your readers by not having a professional editor. Sloppy AND poor writing AND not worth the money for this shoddy put together book. I can't believe a writer would publish this and not be embarrassed.