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- Publication date : April 3, 2020
- File size : 1267 KB
- Word Wise : Enabled
- Print length : 629 pages
- Text-to-Speech : Enabled
- Language: : English
- X-Ray : Not Enabled
- ASIN : B086GM3R68
- Screen Reader : Supported
- Enhanced typesetting : Enabled
- Simultaneous device usage : Unlimited
- Lending : Enabled
- Best Sellers Rank: #5,338 in Kindle Store (See Top 100 in Kindle Store)
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1) The dialogue was too disrupted during most of the book. She'd have the character say something, then go into a tangent of their feelings. Until the other person responded, I'd forget what the original character said. Needed to go back many times to reread - that is something you never want in a book! It makes people put the book down and cross off the author for later books. And others mention this in their reviews. I just feel in her exuberance, the author had a lot to say and got carried away. That would be corrected with an editor or proofreader. There were a few scenes where she didn't do it, particularly between Naomi and Charlotte after the second debate. That was well written. The other dialogue scenes though were painful.
2) The novel was highly repetitive not only in sentences and thoughts, but words. If I never again read the line 'she bit her lip,' 'she quirked her brow," 'she tangled her fingers,' etc, I will be happy. Possibly a great exercise for this fledging writer would be to sit down and describe people's body language on a piece of paper. Write all the adjustives there are for how people use their hands, facial expressions, etc. She might find a plethora of other words to use in describing characters actions. Until the end of the novel, I had a vision of Sutton having no lips left from all the times she bit them! It took away from the character to always be entwining her fingers or bushing her hands over her dress. Same with the facial expressions of all the characters.
3) The writer was creating a world of a powerful women, Charlotte., but missed the mark because with the descriptive words the writer used, she made her sound much less than she was supposed to be.. Same with Sutton.
4) While the book was long and some readers might like that, I find that good story tellers use fewer words to create a compelling world or characters. This avoids repetitive sentences. Also, punctuation desperately needed work as well as how to structure a paragraph. And the emdashes were overly used and not correct in how they were inserted into the sentence. Just do an F'n period and start a new sentence!
Lastly, all these mistakes could have been avoided by re-reading, editing, and practice writing away from the story.
For me, it made it an unpleasant experience that would make me pass on any additional works by this writer. With that said, the writer did hook me in the 'Look Inside' because she had me asking the important question - what's next? I would strongly encourage this young writer to seek help in becoming a good writer. And that of course is my opinion - take it for what it's worth. I would have loved to give this a higher rating, and seem to be again the general consensus at this point, however, I do believe in reading a well formatted, written book.
What Cass got right was great; characterization (main and supporting), dialogue, sex/love scenes (no fading to black yet tasteful), chemistry (!), plot (familiar yet freshly written), relatable realistic situations and responses (Sutton especially was very fleshed out. I think we all fell for her adorable awkwardness).
What needs work are; setting (could have been in any city, so many scenes weren't really grounded), wordy (loved the length but ALOT of the first half was repetitive) and typos/editing. Now, this seems to be self-published and self-edited so I'll give Cass an editing pass...for THIS novel. Future works will be exponentially better with a professional editor/proofreader (not necessarily a publisher!!!). I love reading self-published works, especially by lesbian authors, but the quality needs to improve over time or eventually readers won't spend the money.
TWW is a great first effort and worth the money if only to get Cass on your radar. It was fresh and pretty intense in the best ways without crazy angst. I hope she keeps writing and puts out another very, very soon.
Top reviews from other countries
Not to say thta everything about this book was bad. The characters were enjoyable and their relationship through the most of the story was fairy enjoyable. But then the dramatic hurdle in their relationship happened and I thought it could have been handled better
I especially didn't like how Sutton behaved towards the end.<spoiler>Charlotte made clear, from the beginning, where she stands when it comes to relationships and Sutton kept pushing and pushing Charlotte's limits, until she reached the breaking point. And when that breaking point wasn't to her advantage she behaved like a brat, completely ignoring the promises she made and what she knew about Charlotte.</spoiler>
All in all it's an okay debiut and hopefully the author will find a good editor for the future books.