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- Print Length: 198 pages
- Publication Date: August 26, 2013
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- Language: English
- ASIN: B00G1ABMPA
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Water Dance: The Story of a Were-Mermaid (The Sisterhood of the Ring Book 1) Kindle Edition
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That makes no sense unless the author's purpose was to rush into some cheap romance. I had to stop at this point where she is refusing help from David and wants to work at some mermaid splash town. For someone going to college and majoring in engineering, sure is dumb! I just can't read anymore because of Ann Nan the banana head!
Stupid "heroine" (and I used the term VERY lightly).
A huge amount of typos.
I kept on reading, waiting for it to get better. Sadly, it never did. I finally gave up toward the end.
I'm sure the author doesn't want to hear this, but this book belongs in a landfill.
If you enjoy plot holes (Ala Batman: The Dark Knight movie), then for all accounts read this book.
Just don't say you weren't warned.
Ann is thrown out of her apartment thanks to some Depression that doesn't really matter to the story. A woman we never see again hands her a ring and says to keep it safe AND DON'T TELL ANYONE. Ann puts it on and when she jumps into the water to escape some random thugs, she grows a fish tail and somehow teleports to Florida. First thing she does? Tells a marine biologist that she's a mermaid! When that guy asks if she'd like a job, she turns him down--to go work in a circus! You know, where hundreds and thousands of people will see her. She might as well have printed out business cards saying she received a magic ring.
She's so stupid that she's actually surprised when reporters start trying to figure out her secret and whines that things are getting too complicated. Well really idiot, whose idea was it to join the circus? Duuuuuuuuh. And to top it off the moron nearly kills herself while attempting a jump from the water with no one around. That would have been putting her (and the readers) out of their misery. Most of the supporting characters were far less stupid, though none really stood out as being more than props.
I guess this was supposed to be a romance but it wasn't particular romantic. Or particularly sexy. The height of eroticism for the author is when a man literally kisses Ann's butt. Say what?
While the author loves to tout "showing instead of telling" that is supposed to add life to the scene, too often the prose is stuffy and lifeless. I love this line when she's "drowning" in the harbor, "No futile attempts to save herself, just a single inhalation of the fluid surrounding her." The fluid? Unless they filled the harbor with green beer for St. Patrick's Day it's WATER for crying out loud! With stuff like that you could never believe this was the perspective of a young woman and not an elderly man.
Anyway, I guess it's good each book in the series focuses on a different character because it'd be hard to like a character much less than this. And that, far more than prose, is what makes a good novel.
That is all.
If you are put off by the poorly written blurb, trust your instinct and move on. The book is better written, but it has problems large and small.
Small: lots of typos, the most numerous being missing quote marks, but you’ll also find a time or two of the “your” instead of “you’re” type of thing, missing words, and extra words.
Annoying: the female lead and the male lead have the SAME LAST NAME, and it’s never explained why or how. There’s no reason for it. They never worry or wonder that they might be closely related. They laugh about it, and it’s only mentioned later as a joke. And it’s not like it’s “Jones” or “Smith” or another equally common name. Yes, coincidences like this happen in real life, but if they are put into fiction, the reader assumes there’s a reason, and is anticipating the reveal. But no, no reason here.
Annoying: it was hard to remember the female lead’s name. This doesn’t usually happen to me, and I couldn’t figure out for awhile why I kept thinking “wait, who is Ann?” whenever another character used her name. So I went back and skimmed, and figured out that the author never used her name in the narrative. It’s only in dialogue when someone else calls her that, or when she introduces herself. I had come to think of this gal as “She” because that’s the only thing she’s ever called. I’ve never come across this in a book before, and when I figured it out about halfway through, it became a little stick poking at me as I continued reading. This is made worse when the other characters also refer to her by her stage name “Arianna.”
Annoying: This gal makes lots of bad choices. She’s supposed to be unable to trust and rely on anyone else because her parents were killed in a fire. Okay. But then she pushes away the one man she can clearly trust, and readily trusts several other people far more a few days later. She is given a ring with the admonition “Tell no one.” So she tells the first person she comes across. And then pretty much everyone else she encounters after that. Yes, she turns into a mermaid in the water. “Tell no one,” remember? So she gets a job at Sea Kingdom as—wait for it—a mermaid! It’s not like anyone will ever FIND OUT SHE’S A MERMAID. She is strongly attracted to David, but pushes him away because she thinks depending on him and falling in love with him will kill her dream (wait, what? Eventually we find out what that dream is…). A few days later she goes out on a date with a STRANGER who says she’s pretty, AFTER she’s been threatened by people who want to know her secret.
Annoying: There is a lot of build-up in this novel that goes nowhere. The author is pretty good at building tension, but he rarely uses it. There are odd scenes that seem to be building to something… but, no. Just a scene. Big build-up to a fancy date with David, and skip to the next day. We don’t even get to see them on the date. It happens again and again, letdown after letdown. It’s overly dense and detail-filled writing for what we actually get.
Annoyance: the magic ring pretty much just makes all her problems go away. Or they go away on their own. This ties into the letdown mentioned already. A reporter starts sneaking around after her. She tells him to go away, and he does. Simple. The guys she works with threaten her. David tells them to go away, and they do. Simple. Another couple of things that would be huge spoilers, so I won’t say… except to say that the problems just go away with no real effort on her part. The magic ring is basically the key to the kingdom of happiness and riches. She just has to come to the conclusion that “All you need is love.” What a letdown.
And oh gosh, the ending. I won’t give it away, but suffice it to say that the characters acted in a completely unbelievable and cavalier way. My mouth was hanging open. What? Seriously?
After spelling it all out, I’m annoyed all over again, so I’m going with the 2 stars.