First off, I got the Kindle edition. Whether or not the editing issues are present in the actual books, I don't know.
However, the Kindle Edition had not a single paragraph break between character narrative. It'd cut mid-dialogue to another line of dialogue that belonged to an entirely new scene, from the perspective of the other woman. Besides the chapter breaks it's all one big wall of text.
I said 'experienced readers beware', but let me be clear. Lesbian romance as a niche genre is not the peak of literature, we all know that. However, experienced readers of lesbian romance need to be aware that this is not high end les-fic. I feel it would actually benefit from a few more of the genre tropes.
The earthquake survival portion lasts for over 24 hours. They're stuck in that broken down mall for over a day. It reads like a hike. They're laughing, joking, digging through rubble like it's an exciting adventure. One mention of a dead guy, and it's glossed over. Then they can't find each other for seven months.
Chemistry is slow to develop and even worse to get into, I didn't feel it hook into me until a few pages from the very end. There's very little drama to move things along. Very bland. The earthquake was not the start of the romantic chemistry, I'll say that much. Just a plot idea to get two people into each others lives. Fair, but bland. It could have been anything. I'd much rather have seen more feeling put into some actual survival. What little damage and risk there was quickly settled through circumstance or deus ex, with little need for emotional development and exposition. Of which there was very little throughout.
New to the genre? Skip it. Old to the genre? You'd have to have high tolerance for formating isses, crappy dialogue, bland character gallery and phoned-in character development.
I've seen worse, but when it takes me the entire book to finally maybe like the characters, why did I bother?
tl;dr: Divorcee realises she's gay. Brings U-Haul.
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