Top critical review
Fun read with an interesting mystery"
August 16, 2019
The Rise of a Forsaken Lady: A Historical Regency Romance Novel was a fun read with an interesting mystery. The characters were nicely developed and their actions mostly made sense. I say 'mostly' because I never could figure out why the heroine, Lady Penelope, kept allowing Hillbrook to hang around. I know he was the brother's best friend, but I think she could have stepped away from him a bit more. It wasn't too distracting though.
I really liked the hero, Mr. Moore. He was nicely rounded with some interesting skill sets. I also liked how events and actions in the story weren't rushed. Things took time in those days and that shows throughout the story.
The descriptions of areas and dress were good and the story flowed well.
The main reasons I only gave it 3 stars was the modern language and/or word use and the errors. Lots of little errors.
Modern language in a historical novel drives me crazy. To me, no matter how interesting the story it, it just seems like lazy writing. I unfortunately see this too often. For example, "morphed" was not a word used in that time period. In fact, it was not popular until the late 20th century. "Antsy" and "trajectory" were known words but would Penelope REALLY have used them?? It sounded odd coming from her.
And it sounded odd for Hillbrook to use the word 'ragged', as in 'ragging on someone'.
Also, there was repetitive word use in paragraphs too close together, too often.
Some errors are "He is different, that I am sure OFF." It would be better to be "He is different, of that I am sure."
Mr. Moore said "What can I plate up for you?" to Penelope at a meal. This sounded terribly off as well as being grammatically incorrect.. I think he would have been more likely to ask "what may he serve" to Penelope.
There were many, many pages of these and other errors. I think the author would be well served to have a better editor.
All in all though, a fun read, nice story and plausible hero and heroine.