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4.0 out of 5 stars 3.5 Klovers! Courtesy of CK2S Kwips & Kritiques, July 7, 2007
This review is from: A Night to Remember (Paperback)
On the night of her second anniversary with her late husband, Charlie just wants to drown her sorrows reminiscing about him in a strange bar. She's certainly not looking to meet anyone, much less than handsome Jake.

Jake is captivated by Charlie the moment he first sees her, and fate seems to throw her in his path with each moment. After sharing a night of unforgettable passion, Charlie disappears, unknowingly taking Jake's heart with her.

Three years later finds Charlie unexpectedly working for Jake's company. He's never forgotten her, and is all too ready to rekindle their passion. But will he forgive her when he discovers her long-held secrets?

Eve Vaughn has done a commendable job with character development and plot with her book A Night to Remember. At no time do the lead characters, Jake and Charlie, ever feel like strangers to the reader. The plot is well thought out, and the continuity is sound.

Where this story fails, in my opinion, is in the mechanics. Both the dialogue and the prose are, at times, stilted, reminding the reader they are reading a written story, rather than flowing so naturally you feel as if you are living the story. Add to that the grammatical errors, and the mechanics disrupt the story often, making it difficult to immerse oneself in the story. While not overrun with grammatical errors, they happened often enough to distract. More than once, the word `pursed' was used instead of the word `pursued'. The prose contained repeated, although not plentiful, sentences with clumsy structure.

On top of that, the love scenes came across as coarse and vulgar, instead of hot. While explicit language, when used properly, can be titillating, the language used between the two lovers in A Night to Remember doused what could have been some steamy scenes so that they were only tepid.

That said, Vaughn shows promise with this offering, and managed to move me to tears with two separate scenes towards the end of her book. I am hopeful that future publications by this author will refine the mechanics and allow us to concentrate solely on her story.
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